_; my great sequel idea, would be, please please please finish this! don't let this thing hang!it's painful!

:D

i love it! :D

thanks for writing it. i hope you have a sequel *checks* XD

Interesting story. It would be cool if you could expand on the characters' lives and personalities a bit more. Like, why are Gabrielle and Cathy friends? What is their friendship like apart from this new, awkward romantic aspect?

(Btw, I think you meant "coach" not "couch" and "chica" not "chicka"?)

You should rly finish this, its really good so far. I wanna see what happeneds with Cathy and Gabrielle. Update soon.

good start...hey, finish it then. i can't wait to know the rest. :-)

hey! just wanted to tell you, that i like your stpry. quite much. sorry i am no writer.. im actually really really bad in wriing ( especially in my mother tongue [ if you write it this way] but its quite goodand i hope you will continue soon!merci

's really good. some of the words and phrases dont fit together well, but i like the concept.

i think, you'll finish it off really well

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ah! It cant be over! no! *runs to bug you about writing more*

your describtion of this sensual moment in the shower steams throuh the story, makes me wonder, if i closed the bathroom-door. well done.m.

very good, but also confusing, the way the ping pong the feelings is just a bit sloppy, but your heart's in the right place.

wow this is really good. please continue!

THAT WAS SO GOOD, PLEASE RIGHT MORE. I THOUGHT IT WAS SO BEAUTIFUL.

Oh this is very, very good. I cannot wait until you write the next chapter. Your style of writing is different, but not in a bad way.

Oh! do continue.
I like all your characters. It's really easy to see Gabrielle's confusion. Don't torture them too long though.

Great!

Check your English, and make the chapters longer, with more details!

Going well so far, just keep an eye on your spelling. I'm pretty sure you don't mean to call John her 'couch'. Asides from that well done, looking forward to more.