i think you have a good idea going here. however, you do have grammatical and spelling errors, such as saying "expecting" instead of "accepting." make sure that before you post, wait at least half an hour and reread your work. that way you notice errors.

-an ebony flame

Sorry I haven't reviewed for the 2nd chapter but here it is now )

I like how tori is a tomboy. So far, I like everything about your story. I hope you update with the 3rd chapter soon! I can't wait to see what happens next!

i forgot about this story and was like "OH COOL" when i saw it was up. ok i like the action and everything about the chapter, mostly how you write the characters, but could you explain more about what happened in the last 3 years.

Sounds like this is going to be really great...I'm hooked! Can't wait for the next chapter! Keep it up )

Interesting story! I really like it so far! You should continue. Nice job!

great combination; suspence, action, romance, horror, totally and completly awesome. can't wait for more!