Reviews for Alone
scary miss mary chapter 1 . 2/11/2005
Hey, thanks for reviewing my story 'Black Unicorn.' Allow me to apologise for the short chapters. I assure you, there is a reason for them (other than my extreme laziness.) The following chapters will be longer, although I'm not very good at updating regularly. I was wondering if you could give me a bit of extra feedback. "the chapters after the prologue dissapointed me" - Could you tell me what it was that disappointed you? The reason I ask is I'm working on a re-write, so I'm very open to suggestions for improvement. If you could get back to me, that would be great!

Anyway... I'm loving your poem. The short lines create a feeling of rising panic. The repetition of "why did you leave me" is very poignent. Great work.
Rocky G chapter 1 . 1/12/2005
Very nice sounds straight from the heart. Leaves you feeling sad after you read it.

Vicky D chapter 1 . 5/8/2002
Love it Jedzi-sama... though I've heardyou tell it to me many times befor, and you must hvae been sad, what else could have you writing osmething like that, but then again I shouldn't be talking P

kurdtcbn chapter 1 . 5/1/2002
I does have a depressing sound to it(but then again so does my stuff)So dont take this as rag but to it kinda sounds like one of those "new age" know what I mean (I hope)But for your first it's pretty good
Inevitable Heartbreak chapter 1 . 5/1/2002
You guess you were sad? I'd have to agree. It has a really sad tone, but I like it.