the plot majorly twists wow can't wait till next chapter _~

your cool and you know it and so is this fic .~

Ray weres the rest your leaving me in anticipatition as i love readng books. as im reading them im putting your voice in my head so its like your reading it to me!

It looks like this story is the one route of life you can take and the other story is the other route you can go down again i can relate them to you. i dont know wether its because i know you or what but they are both excellent stories and wel written i might get one on the go but i think that would be van autobiography of my life a sad one i think sort of like anne berlin but i will see i dont think im ready for the wolrd to know " me as i was and not what i am now " good title to a book i think! any way hun hit me with some more as i rally enjoyed reading them. loves you.x.

Hi Ray! Hmmm...I saw your pic! You're cute! Really! But why weren't you laughing? Anywayz you're cute and funny! Heheh! I hope we will chat again! Byee! Cya!

I like this. It's very interesting and the beginning was well written. It kind of dragged along in the middle but overall it was pretty good. Keep writing.

This is really good! You should keep going, definately. I can imagine everything from the great detail you used. Keep up the good work .

Ok. Per discussion:

Like the plot reveal but think you could use more discription on some things. I'd break this down into several chapters to flesh things out.

Check your tense and decide on active/passive voice.

A really good start on a complex work. I'll be watching this to see how it unfolds...:)

ohhhhh wow ive never rad ne thing like that before i love the reflection of the character the start, but you have to carry it on im dying to no whats going to happen

very cool, different. I like it a lot and i can't wait to read more. You've got a hell of an imagination

Cool story! Well written, and it actually has a good plot ;) No hot reviews, sorry Ray :)

odd but cool nah don't let the 2 review hurt ya sometimes people overlook the best things

Now that was good, nice expression of the characters emotions and fears. Thge setting was also very clear. NICE!

Looks good so far. Keep it up, and try to explain things a bit more. The whole phoenix thing is still confusing. The idea of the Anti-christ being a good guy is interestin though. Keep working on it. :)