Oh, I loved this story. So sweet and funny. It's really great. Good job

Hey,

This is so good?

How did you come up with the idea of this story?

I love it, one of the best storys i have read before.

keep up the good work

Aw. So cute.

I probably wouldn't have slapped him.

You have to just expect boys to be stupid every now and then, it's in their nature.

She should kill him.

Hahaha.

Just kidding.

hey? ok, im not even sure if youre going to reply- but id like to read that varisa story. this one is really good right now though and im really sad that you removed yuor other stories before i had a chance to read them. im sure theyre great because this story is one of the best ive read on fictionpress- and believe me, ive read a lot. ok- iim rambling... bye! write on.

I really like this! I love historical stories (whether correct or not) but it definitely needs a humoristic undertone, and this story sure has it :D

Your writing style is really interesting (:

phenomenal! kudos to you! i loved it

:)

That was so amazing! Great job

:)

Peace, Love and Happiness!

-Bubbly Girl

Oh.

very different but so good :)

Ri

ah cute :D

Oh my, this story is absolutly fantastic. I read it all today, and I am quite pleased with the end. I laughed until I fell of my chair that I was...perched...on a bit uncomfortably. I blame the chair. ANYway, I really like the story :D

Kudos! A very good and entertaining read indeed! :o)

I think she said NO! Just kidding! Gosh I loved that story, so many twists' and witty comments. For some reason I enjoy stories from the years before I walked the earth, it pulls me in. So your story was absoulutely wonderful! My favorite character is Aviah, obviosly. She likes to speak her mind and has the funniest comments ever. I also like kaden's character, he's such am egoish person. I like how it ended too! Amazing!

I have just one question for you, I thought Sondra was against girls riding horses'. Why in the end, is she riding one herself?

Continue to write!

haha! i like how the raised eyebrow was a "slight violation."

though i found this chapter a little strange. i dunno... just that you dressed Aviah like Jasmine (i expected a traditional shalwar kameez), and then threw an Indian tikah on her, and then added in all that sexism. i know this isn't supposed to be historically accurate, but why would a country that seeks to shelter and undermine its women dress them so immodestly? none of the Muslim nations that you're alluding to would do so. again, i know it's all fiction... but i still found it odd.

-zozo