haha! i like how the raised eyebrow was a "slight violation."

though i found this chapter a little strange. i dunno... just that you dressed Aviah like Jasmine (i expected a traditional shalwar kameez), and then threw an Indian tikah on her, and then added in all that sexism. i know this isn't supposed to be historically accurate, but why would a country that seeks to shelter and undermine its women dress them so immodestly? none of the Muslim nations that you're alluding to would do so. again, i know it's all fiction... but i still found it odd.

-zozo

you're right; Aviah and Kaden are growing as people. i'm quite liking Kaden; he's definitely developing a nice personality, and the sarcasm suits him.

-zozo

i like the bit with the misshapen horse, but didn't Aviahnna overreact when the prince ran into her? i mean, when some kid knocks into me i'm annoyed but not enough to throw him into the mud and beat the crap out of him. she could always just write another letter...

-zozo

this was truly an amazing story and this ending fit it to a T. i absolutely love your writing... the words just seem to flow together very effortlessly and the banter and humor between the two main characters just seemed so natural. the story was the usual cliche of i hate you then fall in love and get married. you differed your story... it was set in old times but seemed to have a very modern twist on it.

i would definitely love to be able to read more of your writing... so i hope you put more stories up! :)

This was cute but I definitely wasn't hooked. The (read:)s bothered me a bit and it seemed like you were jumping around a lot which made it a bit hard to read. I'm not crazy about this first chapter but I'm sure it'll get better :)

Coffee cream eyes? Didnt u say Kaden's eyes were grey or something?

Still liking it very much...I just love Aviah's attitude..wish i could be more like her...

As for criticism (I know the story's been written ages ago and ur probably not really reading new reviews but... in case u are): Sometimes the tense change to present doesn't seem appropriate...like they seem to refer to actions rather than aviah's thoughts. Also I was wondering abt her dad talking harshly to Kaden..if he wanted the guy prince to marry his daughter that badly I would've rather expected him to show Kaden more respect...

Anyways...off to the next chapter!

Hi! That was a very funny chapter! I loved the part "take his five-hundred pound body for a little roll down the hallway" - was so funny!

So far I like Aviah and ur writing style. The only thing I didn't really like was the tense changes b/w the actions and aviah's thoughts - I read ur author's note, so I do understand ur trying something different. I just don't like it much.

Anyways...off to the 2nd chapter!

omgg. it finished! :'( AWESUMM.

o, i quoted something of yours in my 'book of quotes' of you dont mind; “You didn’t eat, you never slept unless you couldn’t take it anymore, and when you did you woke up screaming her name over and over again. You mumbled it at court functions, and read that stupid Snow White story until the pages tore. You lived, breathed and walked her when she wasn’t there – and now you’re going to say it’s too much, just because her father is an idiot?”

omgg, i luv that!

t'was awesum xD

argh I

another awesome chapter! hez a prince! rofll.

umm, i'd like to read "varissa" if i knew wat it was about..?

lmfao. sweet!

bahahahaha. i like. tis pretty funni, and methinks it shall get better xD

the story was intense and very dramatic. i love it. it's very original and kind of unpredictable. great story.:D

aw thats so sweet...i love it