Reviews for When the line starts to blur
raingurlsofia chapter 1 . 12/31/2004
Wow... I really liked the ending. Firstly, when you switched from third-person to first-person, you seemed to begin all your sentences with I. Such as: I whisper out loud. I take a single step forward. You probably made this your scared tone, but you could've made the sentences more interesting and easier to get through. There are a lot of missing spaces, periods in the wrong places, sentence fragments, and missing capital letters.
Lisa chapter 1 . 8/16/2002
I liked it very much, very good.
kodomo chapter 1 . 8/16/2002
Props on the fic. There was a lot of good detail, it made the story come alive. keep it up

Julie chapter 1 . 7/30/2002
Ohayo Miyamoto-chan! It's a good story! *waits for more chapters*