Like all of your awesome stories, very, very, VERY well-written. Gripping and intense. Draws the reader in. Writing about such an event, if you've not experienced such, is difficult. You pulled it off superbly! Magnificent job, keep writing!

Ten out of ten!

a good one man I couldnt live with that. If it happened to me...

Negasi

This is so good, but i have ONE little problem!

The line "I was mortified to see.." Why would you be embarassed? Why! Lol it doesn't make sense! but apart from that it's fab!

bloody smashing stuff

Ooh wow! The bit about the hairline crack was very good!

Keep Writing! _

Well...I'm glad that isn't written from experience. An extraordinary story, beautifully carried off, and I like how you end not on the note "I will never forget that day", but, "I will never forget *how I felt* that day". It focusses on an entirely separate emotion from what you'd expect. Lovely.

wow! that was good too

Wow! That's amazing. )

Hrm. Reminds me of a "Short Story" I read for English in like... october, '03. Very descriptive, awesome.
kudos.

Wow! That's all I can really say is just wow!

Nice details of the accident. It sounded like something that could really happen to someone. I don't think you needed that line at the end, though. The story's a lot more powerful without it. I liked the line that said, "I waited as the black shroud flooded over me ... ". I think you were referring to unconsciousness, but the use of "flood" also brings us back to the water images. And I found it sort of ironic that Steve was cradling a cup of water in his hands at the end. You painted a picture of water as this deadly, dangerous thing, but then subtly remind us about how life-giving it is. And the use of the word "cradling" was good. People cradle animals, babies, loved ones ... It really provides an interesting contradiction. I really liked this story. Maybe someday you can make it into a real story, not just a narration of an event. I think you could have fun coming up with characters and personalities so we really sympathisize with the people going through this horrible accident.

Wow, this is very good. It's very vivid and powerful; I could see these images in my mind like a movie. Very nice. Keep writing!

depressing and uplifting,nice

i really loved that story. very powerful. just thought id review cuz u only have two reviews. oh, p.s. I love ur column! very cool.

Oh...*blinks and shudders*

That is one experience I don't know if I could handle...but maybe no one does until they are in that predicament...it really is a scary thought.

As I read this, I felt as if I were actually there. That I could really feel that icy water. It's a wonderful thing though that instead of panicing and thinking only of yourself...you helped Steve. I don't know if many would do that, but perhaps they would.

Your descriptions were wonderful. As I said, I felt as if I were really there to experience it. I really enjoyed this. And at the end, the closing to wrap it all up, very nice. I don't think anyone would be able to forget something like that.