lovely!

great story update asap!

Sounds interesting so far. Please continue.

awwwwwwwww. *sniff* that's sweet.. i'm glad you updated, and thanks for the email, otherwise i'd have missed it! :) more!

I love you for finally updating, yet I hate you because it was so darn short. It's coming along very nicely though, but you're killing me. I want to know what happens! Arg!

Hey! It really sounds like those novels that you'd read. It's really great! Please continue soon. I've taken a liking to Cash.

PS: You don't have to but please come by and check out my stories sometime. They're mostly fantasies and general crap.

Wow! I really loved this begining of your novel, and i really hope you are going to finish writing it... ill bookmark it!

wow, fantastic, soplease get the next hapter up! plllllleaeeeeease!

I think that was absolutly great! You should definitly write more soon... Ill keep checking to see when you post your second chapter! (

For a one-pager, this was excellent. :)

You've got all the neccesary ingredients to start a good story- good plot, good characters, great opening. I loved the frankness of the opening sentance.

Not much to say, considering there's not much to review on...hint hint. I rarely ask the writer to continue...but here I am, to tell you, CONTINUE! I think this could be a great story. You have the talent, kiddo. Use it, and use it well.

...and the grammar/typos thing? there were some, but it's really not a big deal. If you like, email me, and I'll make a list for you.

...trinity...

Ok for one thing you cannot stop writting this story. I am absolutly intrieged but the only ssuggestiong I would give is if you would tell us in the next chapter who the girl was and I hope she still has her virginity intact so she can be with Cash.

One, thank you so much for reviewig my story. You're a doll. _ And two, this is awesome! Very nice, indeed. And don't worry about mispelled stuff or typos. That's just small stuff. Plus, I find that the best writing has been done in a hurry, as ideas are flooding in, you know what I mean? The small stuff can be fixed later, if you find it to be a problem. If not, just leave it. It's easy enough to read, who cares if it doesn' look perfect, right? _ I love it, please keep writing.

this is excelent. please upload soon. there are only a few misspelled words... and i wouldn't worry about them. they aren't very noticable.