Reviews for The Starbird Hunt |
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![]() ![]() i love yoh |
![]() ![]() ![]() Man, phil. What 14 year-old doesn't love sitting on their ass in front of the comp! lol. Boy, those space 'coons really get nasty! glad we don't have any. that old dude is weird. For a miute i thought he'd go dowm with his ship and almost take the rest of the six w/him! that would've sukked. This is a great story. :) ((SOO much better than mine, which I have been contemplating about starting fresh on. You know fix things.)) I do this too often, but i was thinking about starting another story before I finish the rest. based on a long and detailed dream I had once. I had another one last night that had th aliens from the "Alien" movies in it. It was neat. Keep on writing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() SPACE 'COONS! dun dun duuuuuuuuuuunnn! haha, that's funny. I laughed, I cried, I ate food! haha, that's oak-ayyy! |
![]() ![]() ![]() whoa, interesting |
![]() ![]() ![]() haha, Yak Waffles... more like 'yuk Waffles. :) Thanx for reviewing more of Zargon and Katelyn. I understand what you're saying... and I thank you ALOT! you know, you don't catch these things when you yourself are going over your own things. I really appreciate it. Hey, do you think I should re-write the chapters? because you made a very important point there in your review, and you're right. I already though of few places where I'd be able to ake tha chapters longer. make the story go a bit slower comparatively. Any way, I just want you to know how much I appreciate you giving me advice! :) Lov, Lornie |
![]() ![]() Nice story so far. Lacks character development. |
![]() ![]() ![]() hey, I never realized that part in Zargon and Katelyn was like Gladiator, I never saw that movie. haha, thanx for reviewing my story by the way, I really appreciate reviews, but then, most pple do, right? I like the story so far! It's very original, too. I like Faytan and Luciem. They're funny. On to the next chapter! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() The story is still quite entertaining. Please continue! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Seems pretty good so far. I shall continue reading this. Feel free to read and review any of mine. |