|Reviews for Unspoken Insanity|
| The Intelligent Designer chapter 26 . 10/5/2006
You have a SERIOUS erorr here. This is impossible. "The nearest city will take us at least 3 hours to get to." So, I assume their school is in the same city, as they live in, right? How can you get to a place that's 3 hours away in less than 10 minutes?
| The Intelligent Designer chapter 3 . 10/5/2006
I like this quite a bit. The only problem is that the way you get these 2 together is a little cheesy. It's not bad, but it's not all that believable to me.
| The Intelligent Designer chapter 1 . 10/5/2006
Wow. You have a very powerful first chapter that definetely makes me want to keep reading the story.
| Irene chapter 1 . 6/28/2003
hey, your story was great! by the way, im megagirl
the story was sort of deepened for me from my own experiences...but it really has something that anyone can relate to...you should really try a sequel:what happens to faith when shes out on her own...hmm...
| Joflower chapter 31 . 3/15/2003
I'm soo happy for Faith! Her pain is finally over! Good job writting this story, it was very deep and emotional!
| LazyDaze06 chapter 31 . 12/31/2002
i like the story & think a sequel is a great idea.
| Joflower chapter 18 . 11/28/2002
omg! get out of there! get out now!
this is sooo sad! they go through hell together, they better get out! there better be a happy ending! this is just so sad and i know that some people actually have to live through that. it's terrible and you write it so well!
| Joflower chapter 10 . 10/14/2002
excellent! this is awsome - in a sad way.
| Joflower chapter 9 . 10/14/2002
omigod! must read more!
| Joflower chapter 3 . 9/30/2002
aawww! he's so sweet!
| Rie chapter 31 . 9/27/2002
Very nice. Although a few words were used too many times, it is very good. Good enough for publishing!
| Joflower chapter 2 . 9/27/2002
omg! this is so intense, so deep... you describe it so well!
| WizeSandz chapter 24 . 9/3/2002
Yo...this is MikageNoMiko...I'm just adding you to my fav. list, and then I'll finish reviewing later. Ttfn
| Alethia chapter 31 . 8/30/2002
Woo. Finally finished reading it. 31 chapters, one sitting, multiple cans of caffiene. Bwee. Too hyper...Anyhow...
The plot of the story was good. Really. It was a good idea, a good story...The ending...left a lot hanging...So I suppose I'll have to read the sequel. Hope it's not as long as this..
And why did Seth help Faith in the first place? People don't really just stop to help people they don't know. As far as I know...
And you were a bit melodramatic in some places. A lot of places. Remember that youe characters are human. They don't constantly worry about the same thing. They're random. They thoughts...Aren't often connected. And they do things for seemingly no point. Like...Stopping to tie a shoelace. Adding little things like that in certain places really helps draw the reader in.
And it moves a little too fast in some places...
Your characters had likeable personalities. And they were (for the most part) easy to relate to. The technical aspects of this story are good.
Some of it just seems...Unrealistic...
But then when has life ever been realistic?
| Jujuberry45 chapter 31 . 8/29/2002
Hey! I'm actually speechless! Lucky for me I can type though. Thanks for dedicating this to me! You have no idea how much it means! I loved it all and can't wait for the sequel! ...Thanks again though. I can't thank you enough. It's one of the kindest things anyone's ever done for me. Thanks...