Whoa. Love this.

I really like it. It flows very nicely except the last line. I mean, I understand why it's written that way and I know (or think I know) what you want it to mean, but if you look at the rest of the poem there are definate beats and the last line just doesn't follow and seems aukward to me. -Unless that's what you were going for. In which case never mind...

Brilliant all the same!

~Starry

ahhhhhh...Takes me back to highschool, to that special someone you have a crush on, but he just doesn't know you exist...two different clicks you belong. Well, that's just what I got out of it. Great job once again.!

Awwwwww!

Katie, how is it you write such beautiful poems, brilliant fics, touching stories and intreguing novels?

your so goddamn fab gurl!

keep it up!

Trudy xx

OMG! u didnt just write that? that was the most fabbest bit of poetry iv ever read kat! this is well good! i love the rhythum! now y cant we study kat poems in skool then crappy other 1's!

Kat u shld write more poetry! tis so much better then mine!

a1 hugs

luv Hayley (BB) and Louise (mark-mad)

Ohhhh Man... I so envy you... here I am... been writing poetry since before I could talk and then you just do like that and you make a perfect one like this! You are talented darling. It's a very sweet and kinda searching poem... really good and you should write more!

Love Elisabeth

awwwwww hunny, that was a really really beautiful poem! so... searching, i think the word is.

so lonely too, tho; kinda like unrequited love.

awwwww hun, i love it, was really special to write, so don't worry!

all my love darling

Kate

xxxxxx

awwwwwwwwwwww that was dead cute! and it rhymed without sounding forced which was great! Yes, me liked, and poetry is so hard to do, so BIG, HUGE thumbs up to you!