I loved your story! I'm a little confused, however. I'm gay myself, and I couldn't figure out if Fabrizio was one the taking or Carlos? Or vice versa? And what type of drug killed Carlos? Other than that it was very well written!

That was like completely sad! I hope he'll be alright. And I hope you continue.

Wow. Very emotional. Poor Carlos - even though he turned out to be a creep, it still sucks that he died like that.

I'm liking Fabrizio more, too.

Carlos deserved it. *hugs Fabrizio protectively* Anyone who is mean to Fabrizio deserves it. And that includes you, O mighty authoress. SO WRITE HIM A HAPPY ENDING, Y'HEAR?

Okay. Three quotes that really touched me:

"...he didn't need the shy adoration that I could offer him. Oh no." - It seems a statement of pure loneliness and heartache at first, but the last two words provide a bitter twist that really gives Fabrizio's emotions a third dimension. It shows his feelings of inadequacy, which is the prelude to his jealousy. And of COURSE he's bloody jealous. I would be.

"'Your eyes have gone green, Fabrizio.'" - Before that, I still held a faint hope that they might have somehow worked it out. But in that simple sentence, Carlos shattered it. He's NEVER called Fabrizio by his full name, always 'Brizio. Hearing him say it was... gut wrenching. It was the sound of a plate shattering as it hits the floor.

"'Listen to me, you tart.'" - No ridiculously empathetic analysis of character emotions this time. I just wanted to say that this totally cracked me up. Once I'd recovered, I cheered Fabrizio aloud. Quality!

Okay. Next chapter!

Sorry that it took so long for me to get out and about and review this story. Wonderful, so far! I adore this story, and these last few chapters have been very good. I can't wait to move past this point, though, and on to the happier sections.

I'll write you later!

Really great chapter! Man, what a scary father poor Fabrizio had. Anyway hurry with the next update, can't wait until the real action begins!

At last. Well done Fabrizio! Even if it was a rather passive version of fleeing ; What more can I say? Great, as usual! And try not to take so long about the next chapter, won't you...

Whoa.

I love this. I love the setting and the plot and Carlos. It's unique and cool and I'm hooked _

Yay a new chapter! Once again this was really good. Poor Fabrizio though! Bastard father, I hope brizio goes back at the end and exacts his revenge...and hopefully help his mother. She's going to be in a lot of trouble. And now Carlos has basically lost his family too *sigh* Nothing ever goes right. However they are together!...and somehow are going to end up at the assasin school. I really hope this is a happy story though I have this feeling you're not the type who usually wries happy endings. I guess I'll just have to wait and see. Great new chapter! Oh and damn that whore!...it's not like he really affected her, I'm surprised she had any pride to bruise *grumble* Right, gonna stop rambling now :)

Simply fabulous. You're the real deal.

That was great, and you should keep going, its really a rather interesting story, and I want to see it fully developed.

Wow this is an amazing story! I'm really not sure what else to say. I got pulled in and before I knew it I had read five chapters! I'm constantly paranoid that something is going to happen to one or both of the two boys (Carlos and 'Brizio). But if soemthing happens to one I'm sure the other one will be there to help. I can't wait to see what happens. Oh and I'm interested to see how the assasin school is going to figure into this. Ah! So much to look forward to...can't wait to see what happens! More soon please *looks hopeful*

You finally updated! Wow it was so great and I could feel the how realistic the character's emotion is. The barn bit was really romantic and sweet! I really hope it would be a happy ending because your other one nearly made me cry. Keep going at it!

This was one of the 5 best written stories I've ever had the pleasure of reading on . It was wonderfully professional, and your style is fluid and amazing. Kudos. I can't think of a sufficient superlative.