I really love your story. So I read it all today and grew addicted. I hope you plan on updating soon or I'm going to have to stalk you every couple of weeks to update or something! Just kidding. But I really do love your story. I can't wait for Adan and Devony (I love that name by the way) to hook up! Adan was so obviously jealous of Kasand for a minute there. I just can't wait for more.

That was a great story, I can't wait for the next chapter!
Rosaleena

THis is shuch a wonderful story, I hope that you will fontinue writing this.

Hi, I just looked at all your stories. Now I understand why it's hard to update! Although I can't help but ask if you could continue writing this one. I just finished reading it and I think it's great. One day I'll get around to reading all of your stories!

I love your fic, its entrancing. please update soon

I love this story, please continue. It is a very original story that has elements that are different from any story I have ever read.

Your story is amazing! I enjoyed the plot and the characters, as well as your writing style. The discription is detailed and creates an image in my mind. Other than the few spelling errors, it is wonderful! I hope you continue soon!

great story! can't wait to read the next chapter.

And then I finally caught up... I've really been enjoying myself so far; it's quite the story you have here.
One thing that struck me in this chapter: why does Adan talk of "magic" himself all of the sudden?

The fighting part of chapter 12 was hilarious. The other chapters... Well, a lot of things happened in those, I'd say.

Finally! It's getting through to that thick skull of hers, LOL.

Chapter 4: Ha, that's weird. I always read Devony's name as Ebony, and now they're in a town called Ebony. Spooky.
I know your profile says you don't proofread any of your stories before you post them, but if you keep changing people's and place's names, it gets mighty confusing.
LOL that pregnancy thing by the way!
The rider reminded me a bit of one of Tolkien's ringwraiths.

There's quite a lot of repetition in the 5th chapter, to the point where it seems to be getting a bit too much.
I haven't got much to say about the 6th, other than that I'm still enjoying the story. If you ever have the time though, I'd correct those mistakes; it would make the reading experience more fun.

Why does the king have a different name in chapter 2 than he does in chapter 3? Also, I forgot to mention that in chapter 2, I don't think the parentheses add much to the story, on the contrary. And why did Radnor let her go along with Adan without putting up a fight again? Surely he could've tried to keep her with him a bit longer?

But well. Chapter 3. "Adan rose and walked quickly to the door ushering me inside." I loved that line. Did you perhaps write this story in first person at first? I know it's just a little mistake, but it's like you invited us into your mind, and I liked that; it made me giggle.
This chapter seemed to be a bit less logically arranged than the other two, but I don't care. On to the next one!

Lovely story indeed. It's too bad there are still quite a few mistakes (words in odd positions, "to" instead of "too", etc.) in the text, but other than that, it really is entertaining. Just the right amount of action and progress a story needs.

I've only read the prologue and already I seem to be hooked. Wonderfully written; I hope I'll like the rest of the story as well.