| Reviews for Heaven's Call |
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   Krimsyn chapter 48 . 12/27/2013 Really enjoyed the story, especially Zak's fairy tales :) |
| Krimsyn chapter 21 . 12/26/2013 HAHAHA I love the "writer's block" section and Ethan's version of the fairy tale hehe |
| Krimsyn chapter 15 . 12/26/2013 I LOVE Zak's fairy tale endings! |
| Oritreesan chapter 4 . 4/21/2011 Citrus Scented hahaha cute, both the wording and the scene :D |
| Snow Dances. Death Entrances chapter 1 . 4/11/2011 A good story line and characters, so far. Perhaps if you changed your format slightly? The way you have structured your conversations is slightly... odd to read. Also, maybe dragging out some of the reactions and sentences of the characters, so the reader can truly 'get into' the character, feel their pain, sadness, joy, love. You don't have to take my words to heart, it's still a good story. But, like this instance where Zak thinks ' Zak considered the options and followed Morgan. He was sad. His brother and mother would never see him again.' If you extended it, making it longer, more in-depth, we would feel more in-tune with Zak's feelings. When you say, ' He was sad.', it's very... abrupt. Reading it, you don't really feel any connection to his sadness. It's just, ' Oh. He's sad. Poor boy.', and that's it. Uh... That was slightly more longwinded than I intended... Sorry... |
| autumn-annette-19 chapter 48 . 11/5/2008 Great story, keep up the good work. |
| lovewritermaiko chapter 47 . 10/2/2008 i love it! thank you for writing this- |
| Lady Psychic chapter 48 . 12/20/2006 This was a lovely story and had memerable characters. It was really funny at times and quite cute as well. |
| ItalianQT chapter 48 . 11/21/2006 Yeah! Morgan was finally cured! and everybody is gonna live happily ever after! :-) |
| ItalianQT chapter 8 . 11/17/2006 I love the reference to "The Raven" by Edgar Allen Poe! lol |
| Lovers of Eden chapter 1 . 7/3/2006 aw |
| Green Eyed Pixie chapter 1 . 6/11/2006 i read this ages ago, but never got round to reviewing and i heart this story a hell of alot. The characters rock so hard. ] |
| Prisoner-11 chapter 48 . 3/17/2006 Whee! *frowns* Whee! *sniff* No matter how many times I try, I can't make sparkles! Very nice story, I LOVED it! I actually read it all in one sitting...I think that's 4 hours... |
| eh chapter 1 . 2/24/2006 This is fairly interesting and I like Gregory's personality. Agreed, it is rather funny in some instances, but I want to ask one thing: the choppy sentences and "He"'s at the beginning were on purpose, right? Otherwise I'd prefer you try to smoothen the sentences out a bit more, but if it was done on purpose to depict Zak as a more simple-thinking person, that's great. Just make it more clear. |
| lokita 4 lyfe chapter 1 . 12/17/2005 I just wanted to tell u my friend read me a few chapters of this while we were on the phone and I was laughing so hard...yeah... CHINGE SU MADRE BUSH!PEACE OUTSIDE!~Bluwater a.k.a. Blu |