This story is great. You've good a good grasp on humor, and the characters are interesting. The plot sounds good, but I don't think I can really judge it until you get further into the story.

But, it looks excellent so far. Keep up the good work!

*finally* read your fic... you seem to have this thing for prophecies... anyway, just update soon...

Pretty cool

Ahh... u *finally* update, I see. nice chappie... with the intro of the Firefolk and all.. They really do seem nuts... T_T

Anywayz, r u planning to pair Alex and Ice or sth? It does look lyk it... Heh.

I think u've been reading too much of The Merchant of Venice... now even ur fic has sorta got it in it... _

Forced to...click..on..button...NO! too late! Reporting for reviewing duty as ordered, sah! O, and four other chapters to go! Ve-wwy nice beginning Darke Angel. I immedietly noticed Ice's coolness, heheh. Little bit of character development, a wittle thieving spice, and voila! A chapter to make me wanna keep reading. On my next spurt of reviewing motivation, I'll come back for another couple chapters! Thanks for your review!

'ana, -Kez

hey i have a feeling you are so gonna kill me for this but...i will go through with it.

This chappy is fine and the story is fine. HOWEVER, i think you need to work on your action scenes. Nice beautiful descriptions just do not work for action. It needs to - as Chia would put it - create a great impact on the . actually it needs to be fast and sharp. or mebbe im just in a lethargic mood reviewing this while waiting for orals to start . hehe. dats all i have to say. AND i guess its enuff. :P Cya. :D

Heh. Juz realised I din review this chap... Anyway, nice one... Partly coz it was damn bloody. _ And congrats on writing something below 30 words. P

Guess you'll prob not be continuing this fic for the time being, eh? Nvm. Update ur Music of Destiny fic soon )

cool~ who are those people who keep bugging you? do you, by any chance, happen to refer to me? _;;

Anyway, update soon ok?

Yep, it's short but okau. I like the microorganism thing. ;

TEME! GO BACK TO HELL!

- Isn't that like Shut up? hehe... nice. It's cool to insert jap words in fantasy like stories.

Go Nick! Go Ice!

It's me again! _ Nice kids. I like Tazki (thats bec Tasuki is also my fave in FY. ;)

Hm... I'm seeing a pattern here... Ice and Nick... hehe. ;

YAY! *imagines the group fighting in chibi form* cute _v

O_O Where was I when this story was being posted in the update section? Wow... too bad the ppl here at home are rushing me to get offline -_- so I'll add you in my list so I can continue to read more next time. _

Anyway... your list of fave anime and manga is the same as mine. XD

Keep it up and good luck!

hi clar! yes! ive finally gotten my broadband! so now i can access ur fic! okay, i promised you a longer and better review than the one i gave you last time, yeah? aniwae, is hikaru nick's petite amie once upon a time? and y does alex think that shes a female dog? *lol* euphony..okay, lets se. if i were to do this the pauline chia way.

Introduction : interesting, captures reader's attention, makes 'em wanna read on and find out more abt Ice.

Development : logical, and good transition.

Characterisation :good description of Ice, Nick's description is not that vivid, you make him sound like a brainless flirt at the start! btw, what is the time frame for this story? fm what i can gather, male/female dogs, "bimbo" and whatnot arent part of the language of that time u used swords, which gives the story a more ancient setting. nice arguing btwn ice and nick! is there spposed to be some kinda chemistry btwn 'em?

Setting : okay, i did that is my last reply, but aniwae, smooth switching between different scenes.

Dialogue : realistic, pple can imagine someone saying that to they themselves. i like the last bit in the 4th chap; the bit where alex is gonna mash nick into a pulp. "you'll feel the pain, damn you!"

Point of View : 3rd person, but characters may be a bit predictable, in the sense that nick is the hero, gals throw themselves at him, ice is the heroine, pretty and gorgeous, and both of them are good fighters.

Mechanics : no major sentence structure/ verb problems, but (a cloak would only hinder his progress, for all that it looked grand and added to the dramatics) i think you missed out a couple of words here, cuz the sentence doesnt realli make sense.

Pacing : story is fast-paced, lotsa movement and action, not so much development of characters' personality, thoughts and feelings.

Conclusion : it wouldnt make sense for me to do this section now, yeah?

PS. in case ur wondering, this rubric thingy is fm the narrative writing package, cuz i tot that this would giv u a betta idea of where uve to improve than a whole chunk of words into a single u noe i cant by NSL in endofyear lit and by PC in the recent test.i juz told my mortal to go backto nyps and ask for the gal-hu-couldnt-paragraph if she wants to find me.

haha. finally reviewed your fic. ids so cool so hurry up and update ok? keep it up! jia you! _