Interesting start. I'm intrigued to see where this is going. Definitely like how you're setting it up, giving only a general overview and not launching into lots of details. So, yeah, write some more, and let's see what happens.

Oh wow. The beginning was wonderfully done. I got hooked in as soon as I started reading. The words flow together so nicely and everything. It's just so great! Please continue with it! I want to read more ASAP! _