Oh, not fair! This chapter was too short! *cries* I want to read more! *sees other chapters* *coos in delight*
Regina O.B.

o... I knew Claire was going to get raped! *see review from first chapter* Aw, Xaith, in my mind, is good, but bad. He's good because he sort of wants to "save" Calire, but bad because he's so-said worse than Kale. Interesting, no?
Regina O.B.

Aw, can't Kale be nice to her? In my head, Kale is gorgeous! But, also in my head, all vampires are, so um.. yea! Stupid Claire, be nice!
Regina O.B.

O.. ouchers! Oh wow, i would have been kicking and screaming and tryin to head butt him! That must have hurt like hell! *rubs her own wrist* ahh! *shudders* Great, now I'm all spazzed!
When he laid her on the bed, I didn't think he was going to leave her alone. Heh, that tells you what I'm expecting. Haha, j/k. Awesome writing!
Regina O.B.

0_0 short but groovy.

The first few chapters had me kinda squeemish but I'm glad that it turned out with a 'happy' ending.

I'm always a sucker for a good vampire story...

This is an excelent story you have here.

I really liked how you ended it.

i am not even sure i am going to read the story, but its cool cuz my name is claire too! and u spell it the right way *claps*

I really enjoyed this story, the character Claire reminded me of someone I know. The story itself was great and the grammar was reasonable, the one thing I would like to comment on is that in some of the chapters had huge paragraphs which made them hard to read, and sometimes I couldn't tell who was talking. Other then that no problems. Keep writing!

I loved it! Please,please ma'am may I have another? :-)

That is SO sweet! make a sequel!

Katie, this story is magnificent! You had better get it published. If you would like I could help you with the cover design. -_O Well you know my number. I love this story!

this is a great story!

b.b

Well, it was an okay story. There was a lot of grammar mistakes and stuff like that. It makes it really hard to read a story if there's a lot of mistakes and stuff. I couldn't really tell who was talking. The plot was okay, not amazing. The verbs used made it boring and bland. varied adjectives and verbs are the best things for bringing a story to life! It moved too quickly. I think that was the main reason it wasn't a great story. You need to add detail and conflict. I mean, yea, there was conflict, what with her being kidnapped, but you really need to elaborate on it. Make some excitement, drama, or suspense. develop the characters a little more, and add some more characters. I actually think the best thing to do would be to rewrite it. It's what i'm doing with my vampire story "Silver". So, yea, just work on the story a little more, and it'll be great. Oh yea, one more thing. You keep switching tenses. You have both the present and the past tenses in your story. When reading a story that does that, my first impression is, "this person knows no grammar. Their writing probably isn't very good," maybe fixing it would be a good idea. just pick a tense!

Morgan

please write a sequel! this was a really good story. its kind of like mine in a way. you can read it if you want. its called Bloody Rage. i hope you write more!