Reviews for House Of Mystery
Bob Story Builder chapter 1 . 1/26/2016
They rhyming added a tone of desperation and urgency. The pacing throughout was balanced and quick. I liked the second and third stanzas because they give an arc hinting at tragedy to come at the end like rising action before the climax. Well written.
recalcitrant chapter 1 . 11/15/2003
good poem, nice try at it, i dont know why you change the struture in the 2nd to last stanza.. and for some reason i dont like how u rhyme a word with the same word.. i think you should put some more effort into fixing it up a bit and i bet it would be a lot better

dont be mad at the reveiw i m just trying to help

byrdgirl chapter 1 . 4/16/2001
I like this poem. Not too many people write narratives on this site. There was some confusion with tenses. You switched back and forth and I don't think you need to in order to keep the flow. But all in all, a very good job!