Believe it or not, I had one hell of a time trying to go to sleep last
night for some reason (and then it started raining.frickin rain), and so
I'm lying awake in my bed listening to Lacuna Coil and HIM at random and
just random lines for a poem come to me. So I wrote them down on the
surface of my desk because I was too lazy to get my ass out of bed, turn on
the light and find paper. So I did it in the dark, on my desk next to my
bed and eventually went to sleep. Well I took those lines today and put
them into this poem, but of course, I feel the need to say that I'm still
not completely satisfied with it.I think it could evolve some more. So
anyways, read it and give me some feedback, and possibly helpful criticism.
·÷±=± Demon Rising ±=±÷
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·!¦[· 1000 Masks ·]¦!·
Society preaches right and wrong
Forcing their beliefs on you
Hidden behind 1000 masks,
Conform to fit in
Lose your identity and self awareness
Become shrouded by the darkness.
See beyond the masquerade, take a stand against it.
Throw away your mask to reveal the real you,
Cut away at the strings that bind.
Stand strong against their hatred,
Face their fear, and anger and confusion.
They will condemn you.
Exiled by your own
There is nowhere left to go
Lost in a sea of puppets
Never accepted for being yourself
Ignore them and stay true to what you believe is right
Nothing can control you, nothing can speak for you
Show them you face, mask-less and true.
Society looks down on you from behind the façade,
1000 masks and none of them real.
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
Review fuckwit. (heh, I love that word)
night for some reason (and then it started raining.frickin rain), and so
I'm lying awake in my bed listening to Lacuna Coil and HIM at random and
just random lines for a poem come to me. So I wrote them down on the
surface of my desk because I was too lazy to get my ass out of bed, turn on
the light and find paper. So I did it in the dark, on my desk next to my
bed and eventually went to sleep. Well I took those lines today and put
them into this poem, but of course, I feel the need to say that I'm still
not completely satisfied with it.I think it could evolve some more. So
anyways, read it and give me some feedback, and possibly helpful criticism.
·÷±=± Demon Rising ±=±÷
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
·!¦[· 1000 Masks ·]¦!·
Society preaches right and wrong
Forcing their beliefs on you
Hidden behind 1000 masks,
Conform to fit in
Lose your identity and self awareness
Become shrouded by the darkness.
See beyond the masquerade, take a stand against it.
Throw away your mask to reveal the real you,
Cut away at the strings that bind.
Stand strong against their hatred,
Face their fear, and anger and confusion.
They will condemn you.
Exiled by your own
There is nowhere left to go
Lost in a sea of puppets
Never accepted for being yourself
Ignore them and stay true to what you believe is right
Nothing can control you, nothing can speak for you
Show them you face, mask-less and true.
Society looks down on you from behind the façade,
1000 masks and none of them real.
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
Review fuckwit. (heh, I love that word)