Okay. So there are parts of this chapter that I really, really like, and other parts that seem clunky. I've tried to fix the clunky parts, but I haven't succeeded yet. I think I'm still too close to this chapter to edit it. I'll try again in a few months, but until then, I hope you like the update.
On a semi-related note:
If you are at all interested in stories about male/male or female/female relationships, please go to my profile and click on my webpage. I've made a (currently incomplete) listing of every slash and femmeslash author I've been able to find here on FictionPress. I want it to be useful to more people than me, so I'd appreciate feedback in the guestbook. I'd appreciate it even more if you gave your friends the link. –grins-
Anyways, thanks for reading. Please let me know what you think. I'll see you again next update!
Oh, and before I forget, I have a reply to a review.UnfortunateFortunate: Thanks for the compliments on my girls, and I am so pleased (and relieved!) that you think my portrayal is realistic. I'm not very good with writing lustful/sensuous characters, so I'm always a tad bit nervous about Jezzabelle. I suppose it's just a good thing that she has such a strong personality; she practically writes herself.