In case you decided to follow this story, you can find the fully rewritten version (with Chapter 1 up and Chapter 2 on the way) on my profile; it's called Undo the Silence. The plot's a lot different, but it doesn't start diverging until about Chapter 3.
Hope you like the new story! I'll keep this one up until I get to Chapter 8 in the other one, then I'll delete this one and no one will ever have to know it existed!
Gallons of thanks!