Creative Writing hour 6
April 8, 2008
Faith and nothing more
EXT. LOCAL PARK – 8AM
Jan is sitting on a big rock looking over the tennis courts smoking a cigarette.
Camera is on Jan at first to set up scene, camera then goes to Barrie walking from the opposite side of the park from his eye's point of view headed towards Jan.-
Smoking is bad for you Janis.
Jan jumps and looks irritated
It's Jan, and why do you care if I smoke?
Barrie ignores the question, a few seconds silence goes by
School starts in fifteen, lets go.
Jan shakes her head no.
Come on Jan
No! Why do you care if I go to school or not?
I care about you a lot more than you think.
I'll be there for third hour ok?
Barrie walks away and is not shown in the camera at all after he leaves Jan. Jan is alone again in the park, she lights up another cigarette and pulls out an ipod and listens to it. A man comes from behind he takes out one of Jan's ear buds
Camera- is on Jan listing to music and the man is shown from behind Jan's head.
MAN IN BLACK
Smoking is a bad, bad habit
Jan speaks without looking around assuming that Barrie is back.
I thought you went to school?
The man places a bag over Jan's head and pulls her away across the park. Jan struggles to away but does not succeed. Man gets Jan to a van and throws her in the back of a van. As van doors shut CUT TO
INT. BASEMENT – DARK
Jan is sleeping against a wall curled up.
Hey, wake up! Are you okay? Wake up!
Kyle is shaking Jan trying to wake her up
Are you alright?
Jan sits up and looks around.
Where the hell are we?
I don't know where we are. I don't know who took
us either, I was alone the lighthouse when I was
taken by a masked guy.
I was at the park before school. You got any smokes?
No. He took everything I had with me the day I was
kidnapped. Unfortunately, I forcefully quit.
What does the jerk want with us?
I don't know. He comes down here to bring new
people in. And he does something else down here
but I don't wanna tell you. You're gonna have to
figure it out yourself.
Is there any food down here at all? I'm starving.
No, he throws nasty sandwiches down the stairs
once a day
So what's your name?
I'm Jan, you?
Kyle. Nice to meet you.
Yea, you too.
Jan looks around and sees another room and notices a table with a light shining down on it.
What's with the table?
That's part of what I don't wanna tell you.
What do you mean?
A man comes down the stairs very slowly carrying and axe.
(Screams) Line up!
(Whisper) Follow me
Kyle grabs Jan's hand and pulls her towards the wall where Jan finds 3 other people standing against the wall. The man scans all of the people in the room walking back and forth down the line. He stops in front of a girl and walks her to the open room.
EXT. Basement (open room) –
The girl is thrown on the table and strapped down at her hands and feet. He caresses the girl and she cries. His caressing gets more intense and the girl starts screaming. He cuts off her head and walks back upstairs. The people from the line separate.
Oh my fucking god! How the hell can
he just go and do that!
Jan starts crying; Kyle puts his arm around Jan and comforts her.
I've seen him kill 16 people. No one knows
how he chooses his next victim. It's all at
Does he kill the ones who've been here longest
when he does it?
Nah, this one guy was here a month before me,
another girl was killed
a day after she got here
You have to stay with me. have you tried looking
for a way
out of here?
Well duh, everyone who's been here has. There is
no way out.
Jan falls to the ground against a wall and cries.
(sobbing) We're gonna die here!
Jan calms down. Screen goes black for a second. The door at the top of the stairs opens again. Light shines down, Jan starts shaking and panicking, thinking that the man is coming down to pick and kill again. A new very short and stout character comes to the bottom of the stairs. He throws multiple sandwiches and turns around and goes back upstairs.
Jan, you alright?
Yeah, I'm fine. (Sighs)
That guy was his assistant, sometimes when the man
comes down to (pauses) you know, he brings his him
Jan falls asleep resting her head on Kyle's shoulder, he falls asleep resting his head on her's.
Camera- Shows Jan and Kyle resting, jump to other extra characters sleeping, go back to Jan and Kyle. Lights dim completely out to blackness then the door at the top of the stairs opens and light shines down.
Jan wakes up to the light.
Who are you? Why have you taken us?
My reasons for taking you all are my own, you
have a lesson to learn. I am your worst nightmare
and your supreme terror. My name is Malvir.
(screams) Now line up!
Jan and Kyle run to the line with everyone else.
(Whispers) Malvir. Do you know what that means?
When I was in junior high, I took a Latin class, the
prefix mal means bad while the suffix vir means
bad. (Whisper) Bad man
Malvir walks around everyone in the line and he stops in front of Jan
I had other plans with you, but you piss me off.
Jan is pulled into the other room with Malvir and she is strapped to the table, Malvir is holding an axe over her. Kyle is hidden behind a wall watching everything going on waiting for his time to intervene. Malvir circles the table around Jan gently touching her body.
Well, you know what I want.
Malvir gives a seducing look to Jan. Jan ignores him.
Fine, I'll just kill you then, you are no use to me
Jan is still silent. Malvir brings the axe to Jan's neck
Any last words?
Kyle runs through the room
(Screams) What are you doing in here!? Get out of
here right now!
Come on asshole; kill me! I dare you!
Malvir throws the axe at Kyle but misses; it gets stuck in the wall and Malvir begins to chase Kyle around the room. Malvir's assistant Bud runs into the room.
Malvir and Kyle stop running around the room.
(Winded) Someone is here for you.
Bud gives Malvir a very serious look and nods.
Bud nods. Malvir and Bud run out of the room up the stairs. They hear the door slam and lock. Kyle runs to Jan and tries to pull the straps off of Jan he could not get them off. Kyle goes to the axe in the wall and pulls it out and he goes to Jan.
Kyle be careful.
Kyle nods to Jan and smiles, smile leaves his face almost instantly. Kyle uses the axe and cuts the straps off of Jan. Kyle and Jan hug and Jan looks up from Kyle's shoulder and notices a hole in the wall going all the way to the outside from where the axe had been. Jan taps Kyle on the shoulder.
Camera make sure Jan has big eyes while pointing and that it's noticeable.
Jan and Kyle run to the hole in the wall and look through it. They hear birds chirping, the sun shinning brightly, and people running about. Jan and Kyle look at each other, focus on the amazement and feeling of hope of getting out of the basement alive.
Kyle! Do you see this! We could get out of here!
It'd be great, I doubt it though I mean, no one is
gonna be able to hear us or find us. That hole is
Have some hope Kyle.
Jan screams out the hole.
Shut up he's gonna hear you!
Make sure to show the seriousness and emotion in Jan's face and voice when speaking.
Kyle you need to learn to trust people. We have to
at least try to get out of here, if we don't try we will
die in here.
Kyle walks out of the room out of frustration with Jan. Jan sticks her fingers through the small hole in the wall.
CUT TO: OUTSIDE
EXT: Bright sunny day, around noon
A dog smells Jan and wanders away from its owner and walks onto the lawn, it smells Jan and licks her fingers. Jan takes her hand out of the hole very quickly in surprise.
(O.S.) Hello! Is anybody there?
The dog barks and the dog's owner walks onto the lawn to look at what the dog is inspecting.
(O.S.) Help is anyone there!
(O.S.) Hey (breathing heavily) can you help me! I
was kidnapped and I'm trapped in this basement!
Yes, yes I can help. Just remain calm. Are you the
only one? My name is Lisa .CUT TO: BASEMENT
(O.S.) I'm Janis Miller. There's seven of us down
Are you guys aright?
(O.S.) Yea we're fine for now, but I don't know
how long that's gonna last
Kyle runs into the room
Jan! He's coming!
I gotta go please help us! He's coming
I'll get help right away. Just stay calm
Kyle puts the axe back in the wall to cover up the hole.
Did someone answer you?
Yea. I unlike you have faith in others.
Malvir walks into the room and goes after Jan. Jan keeps running away from him. Kyle runs into the other room.
Camera angle on Kyle following him
Hey guys, we need to help Jan out. We all are gonna
get out of here tonight. Malvir threw and axe
at the wall and it made a hole so Jan stood there trying
to get some help. Someone noticed her but we still
are gonna have to wait for help Malvir is pissed and
after Jan we got to help her out.
Why should we help her stay alive? She's the
Dumb-ass who talked to him!
If it wasn't her getting picked to be killed today it
could have very well been you, he even said he has
other plans. It wasn't gonna be Jan until she started
talking. Now are you gonna help or not?
I'm in, she got help. I wanna see my mother again,
She's got cancer and needs me.
Extra #2 hits extra #1
You and everyone else is gonna help. Or you can
stay down here when we get out.
Alright. The plan is to just stay away from him and
keep him away from Jan.
Kyle and the rest of the extra's run into the room where Jan is being held down by Malvir and all of them run into Malvir and push him off of Jan. Malvir is being chased around the room by the seven hostages
CUT TO: Stairs
Camera angle: Camera leads off of the actors and goes through the empty room slowly going to the light at the top of the stairs. The camera stops once it is halfway up the staircase.
A policeman opens the door at the top of the stairs. CUT TO: TABLE ROOM
The policeman fires his gun into the ceiling; everyone stops what they are doing and looks at the policemen. Express the look of relief in all of the character's eyes and face when the see the policemen. Zoom into Kyle and Jan.