My first four Haiku, about the 4 elements and my feelings about them.
Rated: Fiction K - English - Words: 126 - Reviews: 63 - Favs: 2 - Published: 4/21/2001 - id: 261445
ElementsMy first haikus I ever wrote. So don't be too hard
to me though constructive criticism is welcome.
Fire eater of two worlds
is as well earth's garden's as
heaven's shine and end
Water falling from heaven
rising again to the clouds
Earth mother of humans
being stepped on each day
never knowing why
Air dreamer's element
spirit to the living world
in a thoughtful breeze
Like I told you, these are my first, and until today I
didn't like haikus, but I read some really good ones and decided to write
some myself. I know they're not very good, but please review and tell me
what I can make better.