A/N: Hi guys! I'm re-writing APITH (A Puppet in the Hand) for an assignment, and the last part of the assignment is to get feedback from my peers. So I'm going to post the first five reworked chapters as "APITH Resurrection" to get a sense of whether I'm making it better or worse.
If you can remember reading APITH before, I'd love to know if you think I'm making a hash of the rewrite, and if you can't remember it, your fresh gut reactions would be really useful. I'm particularly interested in the balance between setting and pace: ie is there not enough setting/world building to anchor you in the story? Is the pace too slow, too fast?
Of course, let me know what you'd like reviewed in return :)