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His rose, my wine

Most potent kiss it is our time

Threads torn, dreams released

I open his heart and mangle the seams

Scorched, marred beyond recognition

Slightest of his skin against mine makes the transition

Behind our curtain of my long hair, he breaches passage and I meet him there

Porcelain smooth, in Love by night

No clichés, just our fight

Purple stain, and the lark flies

Charring wings, the sun`s arise

Last word until my sea of green is gone…

Until the night, my Love, on and on