![]() ![]() .. about what people think about my first story it's my first story so of course there will be a lot of mistakes but i want to hear them is it confusing, too complicated, or just plain boring? summary : The people are in poverty and the government insists on more and more taxes. The Company slowly plans the overthrow of the supposedly corrupt government. But what happens when a man finds the truth about the Company and all the Company wants him dead? http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2806684/1/Him_and_Her i'll review yours as well =] 5/14/2010 . Edited 5/14/2010 #1 |
![]() ![]() Alrighty I'm going to review yours, so I guess you have to return the favor now? I have two stories up, Elemental Theories and Impulses. I'd prefer a review on Elemental Theories, but it is significantly longer than the other one. You could always review the first chapter I suppose, if you get bored. 5/24/2010 #2 |
![]() ![]() Alrighty I'm going to review yours, so I guess you have to return the favor now? I have two stories up, Elemental Theories and Impulses. I'd prefer a review on Elemental Theories, but it is significantly longer than the other one. You could always review the first chapter I suppose, if you get bored. 5/24/2010 #3 |
![]() ![]() I have read both a little of Him and Her and Elemental Theories for both you guys. You can read my story, Ordinary Girl, if you'd like to read stuff of mine. If not, try the poems, they're short. ;) 6/19/2010 #4 |
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