Review my poetry and I'll review yours
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It's not always how dark the nights are

It's not always a tear

You don’t always have to be that far

And it's okay, even if you feel fear

You shouldn’t loose hope

And always believe

Learn how to cope

And be someone you want to be

Sometimes it may be a quickened heart beat

Or maybe it's just a path lightened by the moon

It could be a baby learning to walk on his two feet

Or a wife ready to meet her groom

Maybe a smile could make a difference

Or a word that will make a heart dance

Maybe it's love – for instance

And it's all about taking the chance

It's just a feeling

Words can't describe it

Some people say it’s the hurt healing

But others consider it happiness

The birds will keep singing

And the flowers will always bloom

No matter how long you think

Nothing will change – yes, the world could be cruel

Pain exists, there is no denial

It's how you learn to live

Sing your song of survival

And now it's time to forgive

Smile, you're blessed today

Laugh, its a new day

Believe in what you will say

And like a child, love the games you play!

1/23/2010 #1

just lovely


6/12/2010 #2
Lain Sheehan

Really good. The similies and metaphors used are mind blowing and covered in emotion.

The only bit that pulls this strong feeling of your emotion down is that a couple of lines seem to have been written just to rhyme with previous words, instead of actually saying what your heart feels. But that is still over shadowed due to how the metaphors are used and expressed :)

Great x

6/22/2010 #3

thankk youu.. i really appreciate your comment! (:

6/23/2010 #4
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