Flash fiction, one shot. I need to submit this tomorrow and would like some feedback. First line: "I was reading in the park when I felt someone's eyes on me as sure as the sunshine warming my cheeks." Please leave a review; good or bad, I would appreciate any criticism.

"No one else saw how hard she worked every day; they saw a charming, infectious girl, who danced without tire, played cards into the night, and rode as if born in the saddle. They forgot that she was a nobody, that she had no family with which to tie her name or gather support. She kept her status because she kept the favor of the king and her prince" Story removed