Mechwarrior5
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Joined 09-09-02, id: 265445
Author has written 13 stories for Humor, Historical, Horror, Action, Essay, Biography, Fantasy, General, and Sci-Fi.

NEWS: I've started a myspace account with a writer's log (or W-Log, if you prefer) in which I document my writerly activities. I don't know why anyone would want to check that out, but if you want to (for some odd reason) learn more about me, you can follow my homepage link, see pictures, interests, friends, blog, and all of that fun stuff. Plus you get to hear my awesome profile music, so you should check that out if you're extremely bored or something.

Also, I've updated Paid in Blood to reflect some of the changes that I'm making to it, all part of a major over-haul. The first two chapters are up, but unforntunately, the rest of the story willbe a little bit off from there, but not too bad. I'm trying to expand the chapters, input more character interaction, and add a couple more supporting characters and other elements. IMHO, these aretwo damn good chapters, and I hope everyone will give them a look-see to find out what has changed.

Hey y'all,

My name is Jonathan, and I reckon you could call me an average twenty-two year old. I just recently graduated from college with a degree in English and a minor in Business Administration, but more importantly, I got married June 3, 2006. I am now working as a technical writer at a large corporation that specializes in military contracts (can’t say who exactly because of security reasons) in Greenville, SC.

A few months ago I finished a novel based in the Shadowrun world as a piece of fanfiction an moved on to another original fiction novel entitled Dominion of Deceit , which is a low-fantasy type story in a world of my own creation. That one is going along slowly, but I have recently decided that Paid in Blood, the shadowrun story, is a waste, as it is. Fanfiction is quite the dead end in terms of writing, so I am giving the story a major revision and changing it to a world of my own creation, with the same basic plot and characters. I’m going to need some help making sure everything flows well together and that the futuristic world seems believable, so if anyone can review it, it would be a great help.

And about reviews. I am incredibly disdainful of reviewers who try to pass warm fuzzies around by telling everyone they're great. No one's writing is perfect, and simply telling someone "you're story is awesome!" amid a profusion of anime smiley faces does nothing to help improve that writing. Warm fuzzies are a great encouragement to new writers, but once you start trying to mature your writing style, you'll realize that those kind of statements are pure fluff that don't help anything, they don't even mention what was so good about the writing. First off, I will not review a work unless it has at least a few redeeming qualities, and then, I present to the author both the good and bad things about their work, offering criticism on how to fix it rather than simply bashing their work. I think the goal of this forum should not only be for self expression and sharing your work with others, but also personal growth and improvement. You can't do that when you get a lot of meaningless drivel for a review. It only helps to stagnate your writing and leads to literary depravity. That said, PLEASE review my work and rip into it, if you feel the need. Point out gramatical errors, inconsistancies of character, plot, whatever. I want to know it all because I want to make my works the best they can be.

If you have any questions, want any kind of advice, or just want to talk about a subject, don't hesitate to e-mail me or try to find me on AIM (SN = Mechwrrior5).

The Crimnson Example by Venustas iaceo reviews
A revolution will arise against the most powerful dictartorship in the universe, who's going to win? (Chapter 4 up)
Fiction: Sci-Fi - Rated: T - English - Sci-Fi - Chapters: 4 - Words: 5,233 - Reviews: 7 - Favs: 2 - Updated: 6/10/2005 - Published: 5/18/2005
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Paid in Blood reviews
In the year 2042, increased corporate power has furthered development in stem cell research and the human genome. But when an illegal genetic manipulation technique appears in a pro athlete, a former corporate ghost operative becomes a wanted man.
Fiction: Sci-Fi - Rated: T - English - Sci-Fi/Adventure - Chapters: 4 - Words: 15,016 - Reviews: 2 - Favs: 1 - Follows: 2 - Updated: 1/10/2007 - Published: 11/22/2006
El Dorado
When nuclear winter comes in the not-so distant future, a small group of people ride out the storm together, waiting for the day when they can emerge and remake civilization.
Fiction: Sci-Fi - Rated: K+ - English - Drama/Sci-Fi - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,815 - Published: 8/12/2006
Taking out the Trash reviews
Frank Palmer does what no one else has the guts to do: he rids the city of human garbage. But once his job is done, Frank discovers that, in his buisness, no one can come away clean.
Fiction: Action - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,899 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 7/26/2006
The Plunge reviews
A white-knuckled moment for a young boy atop the high dive.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 855 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 7/26/2006
Dominion of Deceit reviews
When his family is enslaved and the Church refuses to help, Jonah of Claravy forsakes his previous titles and beliefs to pursue his vengence and bring down the "Dominion of Deceit."
Fiction: Fantasy - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Spiritual - Chapters: 1 - Words: 3,415 - Reviews: 2 - Favs: 1 - Published: 4/15/2006
Pigskin Pariah reviews
A summary of my last season playing college football-the one that forever tarnished my view of the "fraternity" of sports.
Fiction: Biography - Rated: T - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 4,322 - Reviews: 2 - Favs: 1 - Published: 4/12/2006
The Moderation of Civility reviews
A critical essay concerning the nature of "civility" and politeness within Jane Austen's novel, Pride and Prejudice and its ties back to our own ideas on manners and etiquette
Fiction: Essay - Rated: T - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,237 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 2/5/2006
The Deceit of Escape reviews
When a movie store clerk finds he only has a short time to live, he decides to do something he always wanted to do but never had the guts
Fiction: Action - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Humor - Chapters: 1 - Words: 4,496 - Reviews: 4 - Published: 5/16/2005
Heaven in Hell reviews
When strong enough, guilt can be a catalyst to resurrect the dead.
Fiction: Horror - Rated: T - English - Horror/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,285 - Reviews: 3 - Favs: 1 - Published: 5/16/2005
Gooney Bird reviews
In World War II's Bhurma-China-India Theater of war, a supply drop over China turns deadly.
Fiction: Historical - Rated: K - English - Adventure - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,196 - Reviews: 2 - Favs: 1 - Published: 5/16/2005
1944 reviews
The events of D-day as told through the eyes of a pill-box gunner
Fiction: Historical - Rated: T - English - Adventure - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,450 - Reviews: 7 - Published: 5/16/2005
The Other Cheek reviews
At the beginning of the Albigensian Crusade, one Catholic town will have a choice to make: surrender the Cathars and their beliefs to live, or remain true to their faith and face eminent destruction.
Fiction: Historical - Rated: K+ - English - Spiritual/Drama - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,600 - Reviews: 5 - Favs: 1 - Published: 5/16/2005
The Error of Arithmatic reviews
In the world of sexual conquest, a three plus a five does not equal eight.
Fiction: Humor - Rated: M - English - Humor/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,538 - Reviews: 5 - Published: 5/16/2005