I'm sure she loves you as much as any sixteen year old heart could, but does she write you poetry?

The stanzas are supposed to get bulkier at the end as sybolism for how desperation to keep someone you love in your life leads to you saying everything you can think of to make them stay. Unfortunately, this makes it seem like 2 separate poems to me. Help

It started life as a collection of things that I wish I could say to a person I loved once and haven't since stopped. It therefore needs helpful reviews to get it to a good poetic standard.

Maybe I don't mean it.

I know it's unrequited when you flick your ash at me.

I'm lying here watching you breathing. It's love that doesn't last.

Grey words, they linger. You trace patterns with your finger.

Short one about the difficult relationship of two friends faced with the prospect that they are not experiencing love as the guy meets someone else.

You're full of love but keep it, it's yours. I'll give it to a friend, of course.

Almost bitterness about the birthday of someone I'm 'playing with fire' to be around.

Electronic relationship. It's quite personal so it may come across as a bit lacking in the sense department and I didn't really structure it neatly. I'm happy with that but it still needs polishing up so suggestions are encouraged.

There are hundreds of empty glass girls out there. It doesn't seem to flow very well but I think I like it like that. Suggestions?

The sign says ‘Drink me’ and I will. Need help with this one. Please read note inside.

I want to be your butterfly. About a temporary relationship.

Strike a pose. It's a little lacking in the middle. Any suggestions?

We press our bodies side by side. Can't feel a thing if we close our eyes.

I'm just a teardrop.

It's not particularly imaginative but I'm not sure I want it to be.

It started off being about a simple friendship but I got lost in the meaning somewhere.

Ironic words Don't play with matches.

I wonder, is this the answer? [Moderate sexual references. T to be safe.]

I'm scribbling questions to you all over my skin.

It seems strange, but the meaning is reasonably simple.

And I deserve so much better than to be your consolation prize.

I'm just a doll on a shelf. Not my best but not too bad. Review?

And my very best friend said nothing was perfect, but she never looked in the mirror.

Like a virgin Barbie.. I intended the stanzas to not go in the correct order but now it doesn't seem to work so well. What do you think?

Short one with a very simple meaning.

And some things you will never know.. I'm not too sure about this one but review please?

One lie. What's the harm?

Abstract poetry that quite possibly makes no sense.

Remember to forget.

(Because I hate liars) I don't know if you'll understand what this is about...

Romeo and Juliet poem that I wrote for no real reason. Reviews are appreciated and will be returned.

Well hopefully it makes more sense than a lot of my stuff recently.

I'm not sure if I like this one. It's hard to understand and doesn't make a lot of sense, but there's a lot more said beyond the words so dig your own meaning.

Abstract poetry. I'll be your cheap addiction if you'll break my heart.

One of those short, strange ones.

I promise I'll let go..

Because I was the girl you loved for one day.

It's short but..interesting? I don't know, reviews appreciated thanks.

This is..weird

Lost friendship with a fairy tale twist

I hope you c h o k e

When you substitute feelings, someone will get hurt. Ended up being more about me than the person it was written about =S

There are a few weird things in here that you might not understand why they are there, in fact I'm not sure I do either.

I wrote it a while ago. It's not really about anything in my life but I wrote it anyway.

I don't like it. There's too much anger and I sound pathetic but I needed to write it and I thought I might as well put it up here.

I tried not to make it so obvious what it's about but if you know me then you will probably know..

Not the best I've ever written but reviews would be great thanks

Neglecting this account recently so here's something I wrote a while ago but only just put up here. Reviews appreciated.

Hmm..creepy. I'll let you interpret your own meaning...

General sadness. Originally written as lyrics but looks like a poem.

It's incredibly bittersweet and cliched but I felt I had to write it...

A very random piece..

Not sure why I wrote this as I'm not anorexic and don't know anyone that is but..oh well.

I know several people called Johnny, might be about one of them, might be about a randomer named BOB!

Quite a creepy piece. shrug I'm just trying out new poetry styles...

This is..odd but I quite like it. Maybe I should write more like this it was fun!

...Not my best but oh well

It's a little bit sinister in parts and somewhat..lacking something.

'It doesn’t hurt him. But it kills her' A short poem/song thing.

Events of the day made me write this and a poem..

Also known as 'Why'

T because of what it's about

This is a pretty long poem as I tried to explore the situation a little more. I know this subject is getting boring and I hope to write about something else soon.

'I tell myself I don't love you, it's all that I've got' Yup..same feelings for the same person again :(

I'm sorry this is all I can write about right now..

Very inspiring this guy all my poems are about isnt he?

It has some sort of structure but no rhyme of rhythm

I hope to never give this to the person it was written to..

Woo! lyrics..I've been writing a lot of poetry recently so yeah..here's some lyrics

Because you never forget your first love..

I don't know about the very last stanza..is it better with or without?

'Maybe I don't look upset because I love to see you happy'. Seemingly this is about seeing an ex with someone else but actually it's about loving a guy who has a girlfriend.

I apologize for the lack of creativity title wise, the poem itself was originally going to be more about my own life but some parts are added for an emotive effect, the parents stuff for instance

Well..I'm not...

It's kind of on the same lines of most of the stuff i've been writing recently

Hmm..well the situation in my life that resembles a part of these darker pieces I keep writing is getting better but still, I thought I'd write this.

Kind of an angry letter to a guardian angel

I'm not sure I want to discuss my feelings behind this one...

It's sad..and NOT true.

I really didn't hold anything back with this one..in fact I added parts that I don't really feel myself. Some of is personal though.

Parts of this relate to my own life. I don't want to talk about it. r&r please

I'm not quite sure why I wrote this...one of my darker pieces.

Gosh I was young when I wrote this. 11? 12 perhaps.

Just a batch of unfinished pieces songs/poems whatever I'm stuck for ideas on.

Personal, again about someone. Not anyone I know, not really.

Personal, kinda short and repetative.

Inspired by the titel of My chemical romance's newist album but not by the band of their music. Just lyrics at the moment and I hate the verses. Any ideas on how to develop them? Thanks.

It's a bit repetative and to be honest I don't like it. Inspired by Alys again- though I'm not quite sure why.

Not a particularly spooky title I know but it's a working thing. It's just a chapter story about a girl, Helen who stumbles upon a mystery of a missing girl. Supposed to be a teen horror thing like "point horror" or something. Reviews appreciated thanks

Inspired by Bowling for soup's song of the same title, which evil Alys got stuck in my head.

Kinda personal, kinda not.

Short, inspired by the little message that it says round the edge of pound coins.

Don't know what inspired this really...

A poem about shop lifting that I wrote in a boring geography lesson last week.

This is, almost about a friend of mine. I feel that she's trying to be someone else and then she told a very big lie that didn't affect me, as such but it defiantly broke my trust with her.

Something I wrote for Vixta, if you know her you'll understand. Working titel.

Parody of the Hialry Duff song. Hilary fans I suggest you don't read this.

It's weird but kind of a break-up situation form three different peoples point of veiw. This was really fun to write I ought to write more like this.

Well this song is how you interprit it I think the obvious one is sucide but it does have metophoric meaning behind it too. The verses are about something different though, more close to home for me (a past thing)

Working title suggestions welcome. 13+ for the odd word about been cheated on, For some reason inspired by Lindsay Lohan, she annoys the hell out of me, and that song, over, which is also annoying. So it's annoyingly embarrasing to admit that.

One I wrote a while ago about insparation. (Don't ask how you can "play" beats)

About domestic violence, sorry about the spelling. Not from personal experiance just what I thought it would be like. R&R please, cheers.

A bit short. Very meaningful to me based on something in my life.

A song about bullying.

First and formost I'd like to apoligise because AGAIN it's about perfection. R&R please.

A story about Linzi and Beth Newman, twins who realise they're growing apart.

It's a bit soppy but I'm actually rather proud of this one it's got a cute little melody that makes you feel all warm and fuzzy...um yea I'll shut up now.

Yes, another song featuring the theme of perfection. Kinda short, acustic sounding thing don't know about the bridge though.

I actually wrote this when I was about 11, I got bored one summer and made my own little magazine up. I made up little pop-stars and stuff and this was a song I wrote for that.

About hating your life and wanting a new, better life.

About a young girl who smokes. P-G to be safe. I've been concentrating on poetry recently so this is just something else for my collection.

Pretty boring titel, pretty short crappy poem.

Kinda weird.

I don't know where this came from. Soory I havn't been on ficpress in a while some new songs coming up soon.

I know the rhythm looks a bit choppy but that's just how the song goes.

Idea from a song by whisper to a scream and a song I wrote a while back also called "Short story" PG-13 because of language and other content.

The girl who everyone wants to be (wants to be you), always thought this is how popluar people felt can't say i feel sorry for them though r&r and I'll reveiw you.

"Don't label me" is the message here, not my best but something I felt like writing. P-G because I can.

About being bullied PG for sucide refrences.

I'd like to thank echo despise because her song of a similar title inspired me to write this, the two songs are different though and I hope you don't mind me using your song title, kiwi

Um...yeah havn't been on fictionpress in a while. PG because I want to.

I just got this catchy little tune in my head from playing a melody on the keyboard. I was just messing around and playing "CABBAGE" but then I thought of this.

Not sure why I wrote this.

Kinda fits with my song "Little miss perfect" about a girl called Amy who everyone thinks is so perfect but really she's being pushed by her parents.

It starts off a poppy "geek" fancies popuar boy type song then it gets into this thing about evil love, you reveiw me i'll reviw you.

Reveiw me and I'll reveiw you.

Please can someone reveiw this? I can reveiw your stuff too.

I guess most people have been through something like this, well I havn't but these would be my feelings if it did.

YAY! My goal of 100 writings accomplished.

I'm trying to get 100 hundred writings up before Sunday, this was written for that purpouse only I guess.

This was written for a film my friend, Abi is writting. She made me write it.

About two people who will never meet but are perfect for each other.

I wrote this ages ok but I just put it up.

A load of bitchy girls were being nasty to me so I wrote this. .

This poem is half true but basicly it's about having a boy mate you feel you can relly trust.

This is a good song for when you're feeling down. Written because a `friend` (the one I have wrote about before) was saying stuff behind my back and one thing she said was that I can't write songs.In a way it upset me but atleast in inspired me to write

I can't decide weater I should call this goodbye or although. I have, for the moment chosen although because it is more original. Any suggestions?

Inspired by a film but I'm not going to tell you the name see if anyone can guess.

I guess I havn't been on fictionpress in a while, this is one that I wrote during my `break`

Katie is a lonly girl with no real friends. She thinks no-one can be trusted. Adam's friends warn him it is pointless trying to make friends with Katie but he can't help but fall for her. Will he be able to change Katie's life forever? (Chapterd)

Is she really that different for wanting to be the same? P-G to be on the safe side.

If you don't believe me, more fool you...

A story aobut 2 friends. One who becomes popular and one who doesn't.

And I feel so empty...

Having just turned 14 I don't think I really know what it's like to be 16. But I gave it my best shot in this song.

I havn't wrote this about anyone in particular it's just a song.

I have tried my best but I can't spell.Some of the paragraphs didn't come out right either :( sorry about that.It's basicly about a girl named Jill who is in love with an older boy see what happens here. YAY OLDER BOY 2 NOW UP.

Detecated to the most predictable film EVER A cinderella story. Anyone who knows what the film is about (which is anyone with half a brian) should be able to understand it.

I'm not sure about catagries but this is basicly written about a friend who wants everyone to be like her. Very short.

Maybe it will be ok...

I guess this kind of thing is really over rated and unoriginal but I wrote it about my feelings and this is my take on the subject.

This time she will rule them all...

I don't really know about this one but reveiw please.

This is for a friend of mine, the same one I also wrote "Miss know it all" for. I don't care if she sees this. I don't care anymore.

This is crap I don't know what the hell I'm on about and I guess you won't either.

This was once called

I havn't really thought about a tune for this one but I will at somepoint.

I wrote this when I was 10 but it's better now. One of my first ok-ish songs.

About a girl who trys to stop her male friend running to his ex all the time.

About not being able to talk to anyone P-G because it contains sucide refrences.

Sarah is a real person but in this song Sarah is dead. I think the real Sarah would like to be dead but thankfully is not. pg for cutting refrences.

Just a simple poem I wrote.

I don't know what to say, I think the title tells you what it's about.

Emma wants to discover who the murderer is but could she be the next victim? There are several spellingtypo errors in this story. I'm sorry I will work on fixing that as soon as possible.

It's about someone loving you but you don't love them. Then when you do love them they don't love you anymore. Confusing :s

i got bored and I though "Wouldnt it be cool to have a car..."

It's about wanting to hurt yourself because you've hurt someone close ot you.

I really don't like this at all but hey just posting it anyway. I was looking on a site for a cool msn name and I found this one, turned it into a song and there you go.

It's about how people in a relationship shouldn't be regarded as the other half.

About when you realise someone doesn't like you as much as they once did.

I wrote this a couple of years ago and I just found it.

You know I write about the weirdist of things.(Sorry can't spell)

Kerry is a normal 16 year old girl with PROBLEMS read about her life then reveiw.(Chapterd) please note I can't spell

I don't know why I wrote this.

R&R PLEASE

Homework? What homewok?...

About a girl that runs away.

Everyday is like a nightmare for her...

Some of you might remember this song from a while back a gave it a re-vamp.

Some of my biggest "fans" may remember this song from ages ago.Well I've given it a spice up hope you like it.

We are meant to be arnt we?

A collection of poems written for Emmal Louise Pickering.Died October 11 1997.Aged just 9 years.

About those annoyingly perfect people you get.

It's about knowing what someone is about to say.

Not my best

I actually like this.I don't like many of my songs.It's about feeling invisible to someone close to you.Oh and by the way I spelt invisible wrong in it.

About a lonly girl.

Aurgh I can't stop writnig about this kind of thing it's annoying me.

I just wrote this not very good but please reviw it.

About when you split up with someone and can't get them out of your head.

I can't believe I wrote this.It's very different from my other stuff

About a two faced friend of mine.

Someone told me there's a song already called this :( I thought I was been original.

This is a young adult mystery about a girl who overhears her friends murder.I wrote american stlye for some reason.Please note the spellling and such is pretty bad so if possible no reveiws about that just on my story thanks.

About what happens when your best friend doesn't want to be your friend anymore.

Well it's been a long time since I put anything on fictionpress.This song is sweet but I think I got the idea from something else, I don't know what but oh well r&r please:)

I don't know reveiw please

A weird song with a story in it.

I just wrote this reveiw please.

One of my first songs.I was about 10 when I wrote this.Reveiw please.

Runnig away well...um...I don't really know r&r please

Sort of depressing-ish

A short story about...well read it and you'll see.

This is the soppyest song I have ever wrote it's really sweet though.

A rock love song that sounds kinda depressing but sweet.

A collection of poems about sucide and death. I probably should put them in as seperate chapters/seperate pieces entirely but for now..

Well I think the title explains it r&r please I just wrote this in 15 minutes

I was quite happy with this when I first wrote it, looking back I don't think it's very good but oh well!

It's about finding a bracelet an ex has given to you r&r please thanks

Ok so I don't write poetry that often and I guess it shows has a twist at the end though not a particulary intresting one.

It's um...I don't know r&r please:)

Written about my friend, Hannah she'd kill me if she read it actually she's not quite as bad as the girl in the song.R&r please rather short.

It's kinda depressing bt as I don't write depressing stuff alot it's pretty rubbish oh well reveiw it anyway please and if you have time some of my other stuff thanks:)

I just wrote this r&r please

Have you ever loved someone but they don't know you exist? I wrote this from personal experance contains a verse about sucide

Contains mild swearing which is blanked out a song just about love wit a fairy tail twist please reveiw:)

When Sammy Moore moves schools she's sure everything will be fine, after all everyone is sure to like intelligent, hard working Sammy right?needs serious update

I don't like it very much but I put it up anyway..

I know I know it's completly not my stlye.Me and 2 friends wrote it I wrote the chorus and third verse

Feel good happy song

It's a love song I guess. Slight forced rhyming.

About waiting for someone an early piece.

Please reveiw

IThe idea came to me while I was sitting in my art lesson please r&r this and my other songs I really need feedback

I think this is probably quite a significant piece to me as a songwriter...

Very acustic guitar-ish sounding a bit like "Girl in the mirror" which is my most popular song.One for the fans Please r&r

It's about been put down I know I've posted it before I just had to change it please r&r this and my other songs I never get reveiwed thanks :)

R& r please it's about life.