R. Lauden
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Joined 03-23-05, id: 466177, Profile Updated: 08-20-12
Author has written 11 stories for Supernatural, and Fantasy.

I'M BACK!!! How long has it been? THREE years? Pfft.

Let me introduce myself. My real name is Jocelyn Dennerlein, but I go by R. Lauden. I have been married for two great years to my best-friend. We have a fifteen-month old son named Ashton. I am twenty-four years young. I work full-time as a marketing administrator and mommy, which really limits my time to write. When I do write, I get consumed... which leads to the dishes piling up and the dirty laundry overflowing.

I am cuttently working on MONGRELand WOLVES' DEN.

>--o--

This is the story of a girl. I absolutely love her... when she SMILES.

WARNING: If my stories are plagiarized, I will be forced to remove them from fictionpress without warning. I take pride in my work and will not tolerate someone passing it off as their own. Some people claim that imitation is the best form of flattery, BUT not when it comes to my writing.


I send a lot of read requests. I adore feedback, either constructive or encouraging. The constructive

reviews help me improve. The encouraging ones inspire me to continue. I appreciate everyone who takes

the time to read my work. If you have received a read-request and would like the favor returned, send

me a PM. I'm usually pretty good about returning reviews, but sometimes distractions get the best of me.


I love reviewing, but I'll have you know some of my biggest pet peeves:

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1) Repetition and the Devil. "She went to the door. Filtering through the door a cold gust brushed past her. She knew what she'd find behind that door. Another door, and then another." My favorite saying has to be, "Repetition is the devil."

2) Numbers Out Loud. "I was 5 foot nine when I was 13. When I turned 18 I still hadn't grown an inch." I like to tell people to spell numbers under 100 at the least. If it's an address, a coordinate, or a phone number... leave it alone.

3) Over Indulgence. So they're short... "Her hair was shoulder length, blonde like honeysuckles on a warm summer day. Her eyes reflected the midday sky, blue like sapphires. She had a slim build, common among anyone who spent five days a week at the gym. She was eighteen, popular and untouchable. Her height was about five foot five, her weight one hundred pounds. She was drop dead gorgeous and everyone thought so. She was the envy of men and woman alike. They watched her when she walked down the street, tracing every curve and inch with lustful eyes." Blah, blah, blah. I get it she's pretty. What's she like on the inside? Do I really care that she's five foot five... no. I don't.

4) Their, there, they're. It's, its. Your, you're. Disaster. "Their was someone standing they're a moment ago, I could have sworn. There hair was black, they're skin as pale as the moon. I shivered, wondering if it had been more than a coincidence. Its all in my head. I tried to reassure myself." Honestly, practice makes perfect.

5) Present Tense Blunders. This is more a matter of preference than of literary critique. "I turn to the alley. My eyes search the darkness. Yes, it is him. I know it is him. He is here to take me away. He is here to make me his. I shudder visibly and hug myself against the cold realization."

6) First Person No-No's. "I recognized that face. I knew I couldn't resist him forever. I could feel his power over me. I could fight it as best I could. I knew in the end he would have me. I would be his for all eternity. I couldn't do anything but surrender." I, I, I, and then I some more. I enjoy writing in first person, don't get me wrong. Remember to vary your sentence structure, that is all.

7) Shockingly Annoying. "She walked silently to him. Her fingers tenderly grazed his cheek. His slightly pale face blushed in the dim moonlight." Stephanie Meyers does it. Therefore it is okay. NO! It is not OKAY! You cannot stick an adverb into every sentence and expect it to work out. Too many adverbs makes a piece read choppy.

8) Passive Voice, Claw My Eyes Out. "I was sitting, staring at the clock. It seemed as though the hands were ticking slower than usual. Time was suspended. I was waiting for him to come bursting through the door. The dangerous thought was crossing my mind. Maybe he would never come, maybe I would be trapped here forever. No, he would come for me." This is the most common mistake on FP. Be consious of this ALWAYS. A few slips are okay, a few slips are necessary. I sometimes find passive voice unavoidable. Be responsible. I was sitting --> I sat. I was waiting -->I waited.

9) Just the thing. "That thing jumped out of the woods. It let out a tremendous growl and I just ran away. I felt it bearing down on me. Just when I thought it would pounce, the thing vanished." (I am exhausted... bear with my lack of creative examples.) You can cut "just" from a sentence and it sounds the same with better flow. "Thing" is a shortcut for lazy writers to avoid description. "It" is sometimes okay, but should be avoided at all costs.

10) Talking to the reader. "You are going to love this story. It is all about me. I go from having no friends, sleeping in the garage, and eating garbage, to becoming the most popular girl at school. How did I do it? You will have to read and find out. First of all, my name is Madeline." This is another first-person foul. You do NOT want to talk to the reader. It bores them. They are looking for a story, something to engage their interest. You are writing in first person, but that does not make it a diary. Your character is not writing a book. YOU are. You are telling a story from their point of view. This is THE WORST OFFENSE ON FICTIONPRESS.


A few things you will notice about my writing:

1) I hate using adverbs. They make me cringe.

2) I hate using capital words in the middle of a sentence, unless they are at the end, beginning, or follow a comma.

3) I always end my dialogue with a period or question mark.

4) I avoid using the words was/were at all costs.

5) I prefer when all my paragraphs are the same length.

6) I refuse to use contractions unless in dialogue.

You may find these items crazy, but this is my style. It is unconventional, but if Cormac McCarthy can write without quotation marks, I can write however the hell I want.

"You shouldn't block the page up with weird little marks. If you write properly, you shouldn't have to punctuate." At the same time, "You really have to be aware that there are no quotation marks to guide people, and write in such a way that it won't be confusing as to who is speaking." On a more inspirational level, he says that anyone with enough determination can manage to avoid day jobs and compromises just as he has. "You're just here once, life is brief, and to have to spend every day of it doing what somebody else wants you to do is not the way to live it."

-National Best-Selling Author: Cormac McCarthy (The Road, No Country for Old Men)

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The Deadly Flower by Carmel March reviews
She's a strong, independent P.I. just trying to get through each day. Unbeknownst to her, she's dangerous to vampires. She gets sucked into their world when all vampires make a choice: kill her or turn her. Except for one. He wants to save her. [COMPLETE]
Fiction: Romance - Rated: T - English - Supernatural/Adventure - Chapters: 30 - Words: 167,828 - Reviews: 2300 - Favs: 1,230 - Follows: 1,053 - Updated: 1/21/2013 - Published: 2/27/2007 - Complete
Good Dogs Don't Bite by Friglit reviews
For her 18th birthday, Adrian buys his sarcastic little sister Marah a pet werewolf. But Raze is proving to be every bit as stubborn and independent as she is. Can a resentful pet and his reluctant mistress ever learn to get along? *ON HIATUS*
Fiction: Supernatural - Rated: T - English - Supernatural/Romance - Chapters: 14 - Words: 65,406 - Reviews: 415 - Favs: 333 - Follows: 386 - Updated: 10/21/2012 - Published: 6/5/2008
World War Four: The Vampire War by Mr. Aek reviews
Vampire? Who said I'm a Vampire. Oh no, I'm something so much worse, a Darth - but if you insist Vampire is close enough. My story isn’t the one where good prevails, no - it's the one where evil pulls all the strings. So, lets watch the world burn. R@R
Fiction: Supernatural - Rated: T - English - Sci-Fi/Supernatural - Chapters: 79 - Words: 10,683 - Reviews: 183 - Favs: 44 - Follows: 20 - Updated: 2/20/2012 - Published: 1/24/2009
Porcelain by LookinGlass reviews
Porcelain, like an angel's heart, is easy to shatter.
Fiction: Fantasy - Rated: T - English - Fantasy/Romance - Chapters: 11 - Words: 11,386 - Reviews: 14 - Favs: 8 - Follows: 9 - Updated: 1/30/2011 - Published: 2/5/2009
Fanged Heart by Ember Black reviews
After a night of trying to find some fresh blood, a vampire finds himself mated to his meal. To top it off, they can't be unmated, and they can't stand to be in the same room without going for each other's throats; literally.
Fiction: Romance - Rated: T - English - Hurt/Comfort/Supernatural - Chapters: 8 - Words: 32,046 - Reviews: 36 - Favs: 28 - Follows: 29 - Updated: 6/22/2010 - Published: 1/31/2009
Shift by Cheska DiBlassio reviews
Teagan is not normal: she's a shifter. And she's currently being held as a political prisoner in the mansion of an irritating, goregous vampire. She's also trying her best not to shove a kitchen knife through his dead heart. Her best never was good enough
Fiction: Supernatural - Rated: T - English - Romance/Drama - Chapters: 8 - Words: 21,688 - Reviews: 114 - Favs: 84 - Follows: 105 - Updated: 3/12/2010 - Published: 6/27/2009
Bleed Cyan by steffers reviews
Cohen Zafetti is an immortal being. He has no regrets, until his own life is put in danger. This is a story about Cohen's life, and how he met his end.
Fiction: Supernatural - Rated: T - English - Drama/Supernatural - Chapters: 7 - Words: 17,575 - Reviews: 25 - Favs: 7 - Follows: 6 - Updated: 2/13/2010 - Published: 9/6/2009
Hunter Becomes Hunted by IndigoSage reviews
I guess you'll have to read the story to find out. It's worth it.
Fiction: Supernatural - Rated: T - English - Adventure - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,374 - Reviews: 3 - Favs: 1 - Follows: 2 - Published: 8/17/2009
Chasing The Babysitter by Armith-Greenleaf reviews
REMOVED / What should a girl do if the little brat she's babysitting asks for a deal, to date his big brother and he'll behave? What if that big brother was the most popular guy in school? Four-Shot. No Monkey Business.
Fiction: Romance - Rated: M - English - Romance/Humor - Chapters: 4 - Words: 4 - Reviews: 106 - Favs: 238 - Follows: 61 - Updated: 4/19/2008 - Published: 3/22/2008 - Complete
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Mongrel reviews
Taking a step closer, his proximity inspired a pleasant tremble through my insides. I rooted myself in place, betraying every instinct not to flee. He could pluck every concept from my head-leave me empty and hollow. His knuckles grazed my collarbone, causing a shiver of eager anticipation. My body was screaming for him. I wanted to feel his mouth against mine. Werewolf Romance R&R
Fiction: Supernatural - Rated: M - English - Supernatural/Romance - Chapters: 13 - Words: 30,925 - Reviews: 351 - Favs: 155 - Follows: 237 - Updated: 9/25/2012 - Published: 7/18/2009
Wolves' Den reviews
When Mr. and Mrs. Pierce separated from the pack, they hoped to provide a better life for their daughter. Now that Emma is grown up, she yearns to be with her own kind. Her dreams seem to be coming true until her future mate attempts to sacrifice her to the forest demons. She barely escapes, finding herself in the arms of Cole Bradford and in the midst of a pack feud. Rated M.
Fiction: Supernatural - Rated: M - English - Romance/Drama - Chapters: 7 - Words: 16,614 - Reviews: 29 - Favs: 12 - Follows: 38 - Updated: 9/18/2012 - Published: 7/17/2012
Eternally Yours reviews
When her family is killed by a rogue vampire, Jack is there to rescue her. Then, he drops off the face of the earth. Eleven years later, Willa discovers a secret in the basement. The tables have turned. Will she be able to save him?
Fiction: Supernatural - Rated: M - English - Romance/Supernatural - Chapters: 2 - Words: 2,364 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 9/9/2012 - Published: 9/8/2012
Wilde Thing reviews
Television host Alex Wilde, never believed in monsters. As a child, he never cowered under the blankets or slept with the lights on. He never questioned the scrape of branches outside his window. Years later, a trip to PA changes everything.
Fiction: Supernatural - Rated: M - English - Mystery/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,042 - Reviews: 3 - Favs: 2 - Follows: 1 - Published: 6/22/2010
Aevri Eternal reviews
Aevri expected to waste her summer slaving at the family restaurant, but an encounter with James Paxton changed everything. His family may deny knowing the secret to eternal life, but they've had three hundred years to perfect their seamless charade.
Fiction: Supernatural - Rated: T - English - Supernatural/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 3,015 - Reviews: 5 - Favs: 2 - Follows: 10 - Published: 1/19/2010
Ashland to Ashes reviews
Xeke and Elle have something in common: They are both wanted dead by the vampire council. She is the only weapon against an army of undead. He is the only vampire against the decision to become known by mortals. Will they overcome thier differences?
Fiction: Supernatural - Rated: T - English - Romance/Adventure - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,914 - Reviews: 8 - Favs: 8 - Follows: 6 - Published: 10/15/2009
Nightveil reviews
Sienna returns home one night to discover a strange man moving in across the hall. He carries a massive couch without breaking a sweat. His handshake inspires chills. He even admits to being a night person. Could her new neighbor be a vampire? Impossible.
Fiction: Supernatural - Rated: T - English - Supernatural/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,787 - Reviews: 5 - Favs: 2 - Follows: 2 - Published: 9/16/2009
Wizard of Sterling reviews
Sterling has fallen under the rule of a greedy queen. The royal wizard is playing both sides, trying to return freedom to the people. His only chance is the youngest, most cowardly princess, Princess Charlotte.
Fiction: Supernatural - Rated: T - English - Fantasy/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,190 - Reviews: 5 - Favs: 4 - Follows: 4 - Published: 9/2/2009
Sterling reviews
Charlotte finds a book hidden away in an old bookstore on the edge of town. As her eyes drift over the lines of text, the world around her begins to blur with the world of fantasy. She is immersed in a distant land with wizards and royalty.
Fiction: Fantasy - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 3 - Words: 2,174 - Reviews: 6 - Favs: 1 - Follows: 2 - Updated: 8/20/2009 - Published: 8/18/2009
Body and Soul Eater reviews
When a reaper is destroyed, the next person to die inherits the mask of death. Their soul must seperate from their body and become a seperate entity. Somewhere a reaper dies and with his final breath, movie star Braden Lindell awakes from a coma.
Fiction: Supernatural - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,090 - Reviews: 1 - Favs: 1 - Follows: 3 - Published: 8/13/2009
Bleeding Eden reviews
When vampires kill her family, Eden Starling is left for dead on her bedroom floor. Kaleb Swann, a vampire searching for redemption, must protect her from a blood thirsty sire.
Fiction: Supernatural - Rated: T - English - Drama/Romance - Chapters: 2 - Words: 4,445 - Reviews: 8 - Favs: 2 - Updated: 7/23/2009 - Published: 7/19/2009
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