Neurotic Consciousness
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Joined 08-02-06, id: 535488
Author has written 41 stories for Love, General, Politics, Life, War, Religion, Friendship, Spiritual, and General.

I created this page or whatever it is to gather advice for my poetry. I'm 16 years old and have been writing poetry for about six months now. I'd appriciate any sort of advice you can give me on my writing, especially since I have never learned anything about poetry, and just write what comes to me.

"The real universe is always one step beyond logic" -Frank Herbert

"In vain shall a poet seek the mother of the songswithin his heart." -Khalil Gibran

"Trees are poems that the earth writes upon the sky. We fell them down and turn them into paper that we may record our emptiness." -Khalil Gibran

"But as, in ethics, evil is a consequence of good, so, in fact, out of joy is sorrow born. Either the memory of past bliss is the anguish of today, or the agonies which have their origin in the ecstasies which might have been." -Edgar Allen Poe



Forever by MaybeLater reviews
This ones about a relationship that could never really end.
Poetry: Love - Rated: K+ - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 286 - Reviews: 5 - Favs: 2 - Published: 10/5/2006 - Complete
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The Bloody Dollar reviews
A story about the dangers of extreme capitalism.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 490 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 12/5/2006 - Complete
Toxicity
NA
Poetry: Love - Rated: K+ - English - Angst/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 57 - Published: 11/28/2006 - Complete
Old Genocide reviews
Another poem about the Rwandan Genocide. Done as an assignment English, it had to be in the same format as the poem Old Ironsides. CRITICAL REVIEWS are welcome, seeing as this is for a large grade...
Poetry: Life - Rated: T - English - Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 127 - Reviews: 3 - Published: 10/21/2006
Whiteout reviews
A poem about the Rwandan Genocide.
Poetry: War - Rated: K - English - Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 41 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 10/21/2006 - Complete
Redemption? reviews
R&R, please.
Poetry: Religion - Rated: K - English - Spiritual/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 53 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 10/21/2006 - Complete
Cold Reality reviews
Ignorance is bliss. Please R&R.
Poetry: Love - Rated: K - English - Poetry/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 53 - Reviews: 4 - Favs: 3 - Published: 10/11/2006
King of Fools
Kind of about how people follow whoever is willing to lead them.
Poetry: Life - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 59 - Published: 10/11/2006
Romance reviews
A poem about love. Please R&R
Poetry: Love - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 64 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 10/11/2006
Elegant reviews
About a girl who sells herself to those she cannot have, and plays the ones who would bring her happiness. Kudos, Jamie.
Poetry: Love - Rated: K - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 44 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 10/8/2006
The Benevolent reviews
Somewhat inspired by a visit to Tiananmen Square.
Poetry: Politics - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 47 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 10/4/2006
Repungent Reality reviews
When deep down you know something's true, but the truth still hits you like a brick. I know this poem's crap, but it was just something I needed to get out.
Poetry: Love - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 58 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 9/30/2006
Golden Amber reviews
A poem about golden amber eyes.
Poetry: Love - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 58 - Reviews: 3 - Published: 9/27/2006
The Broken Prophet reviews
This is a sister story to "The Bloody Crux". This one was much harder though, since I know little to nothing about life in the Middle East... Ah well, ignorance is a curable disease. R&R, please.
Fiction: Spiritual - Rated: T - English - Spiritual/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 419 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 9/21/2006
The Bloody Crux reviews
Okay, this is my first foray into the world of story writing. Please let me know what you think, and I'd greatly appriciate any advice, flames or otherwise.
Fiction: Spiritual - Rated: T - English - Spiritual/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 312 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 9/21/2006 - Published: 9/20/2006
Paper Skin reviews
About how people try to hide their falsehoods and shortcomings in pretty packaging.
Poetry: Religion - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 43 - Reviews: 2 - Favs: 1 - Published: 9/19/2006
Beautiful Darkness reviews
This poem is for all you people out there who wonder how you'll ever make it. Just know our sins will make us stronger.
Poetry: Religion - Rated: K - English - Poetry/Spiritual - Chapters: 1 - Words: 76 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 9/12/2006
Lifeless Emotive reviews
What do you become when you can't feel anymore? Well, other then the target of other's pity...
Poetry: Life - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 74 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 9/10/2006
March Ignorant reviews
March ignorant, or don't march at all... How can one proclaim enlightenment, yet blindly follow? Warning: Not for religious extremists.
Poetry: Religion - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 56 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 9/9/2006
Obeisance
A poem about forced conformity, I suppose.
Poetry: Politics - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 92 - Published: 9/9/2006
Void reviews
Poetry: Life - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 42 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 9/8/2006
Sacrifice reviews
When you condemn your soul for your loved one's happiness.
Poetry: Love - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 59 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 9/3/2006
Thrice Damned reviews
1+1+1= hate
Poetry: Love - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 61 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 9/3/2006
Scar Tissue reviews
Pretty self-explanatory.
Poetry: Love - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 29 - Reviews: 2 - Favs: 1 - Published: 9/3/2006
Crucible reviews
A poem for anyone who's ever been in love with a person, but unable to express their feelings.
Poetry: Love - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 49 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 9/3/2006
The Lord of the Dance reviews
About how Christians have had a tendancy throughout history to persecute those who are even mildly different.
Poetry: Religion - Rated: T - English - Poetry/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 63 - Reviews: 2 - Favs: 1 - Published: 8/29/2006
Cracked reviews
Poetry: Life - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 66 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 8/29/2006
Tripartite Unanimity reviews
Just to clear it up, Tripartite Unanimity basically means a union of three seperate parts. A seeming contradiction. Or is it?
Poetry: Religion - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 59 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 8/24/2006
Forgotten reviews
For anyone whose ever felt left behind.
Poetry: Friendship - Rated: K - English - Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 52 - Reviews: 3 - Favs: 1 - Published: 8/24/2006
Halo reviews
A poem dedicted to the old men who use the young men and women of their countries to fight their battles.
Poetry: War - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 89 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 8/24/2006
Greed
A poem about the driving force in people's lives.
Poetry: Religion - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 37 - Published: 8/23/2006
Sheperd of Men reviews
This poem has two meanings. One is about humanity's fear of death. The other I'll leave to you to discover.
Poetry: Religion - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 42 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 8/22/2006
A Perfect Circle reviews
A poem about domestic abuse.
Poetry: Life - Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 60 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 8/22/2006
The Garbage Man
A somewhat rotten poem.
Poetry: Life - Rated: T - English - Angst/Horror - Chapters: 1 - Words: 53 - Published: 8/16/2006
Holistic Incarceration reviews
A poem about the most powerful prison the human mind can create.
Poetry: Love - Rated: K+ - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 51 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 8/15/2006
Brothers in Arms reviews
This poem is not meant to offend any soldiers or those who might associate with them. It's just my opinion.
Poetry: War - Rated: K+ - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 69 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 8/13/2006
Incongruent Existence reviews
A poem about the seemingly inconsistent truths of life.
Poetry: Life - Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 83 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 8/13/2006
Dual Desires reviews
This poem's about the dangers of too much free thought... But who would want it any other way?
Poetry: Life - Rated: K+ - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 72 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 8/12/2006
Choices of Compulsion reviews
This is a poem about people who claim free will but in reality have none.
Poetry: Politics - Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 103 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 8/12/2006
Iron Convention reviews
This poem is aimed at politicians and the games they play. And of course, the people who play along...
Poetry: Politics - Rated: T - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 100 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 8/8/2006
Irony reviews
I don't really like this poem at all. It was a school assignment, which might have something to do with it. But everyone I've talked to has said it's really good, so that's why I posted it. if you can figure out what I'm talking about, you get a gold star
Poetry: General - Rated: K+ - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 326 - Reviews: 1 - Favs: 1 - Follows: 1 - Published: 8/7/2006
Vision of Perfection reviews
This poem is about that one person that everyone seems to look for but can never seem to find.
Poetry: Love - Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 125 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 8/7/2006