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Joined 05-03-12, id: 839382, Profile Updated: 03-17-15
Author has written 4 stories for Young Adult, General, Romance, and Fantasy.

As always, I appreciate any and all constructive feedback, no matter how harsh. In particular, I could use some pointers on where my story seems to lose tension.

I have lived all over the United States, and currently live in Florida. I've been trying to write (unsuccessfully) for awhile. I was able to complete a lengthy fan fiction story with the little bit of motivation provided by a few stalwart individuals there.

I'm also trying to write some original full length stories in both young adult and mature categories. I'm hoping to receive enough feedback here to keep me properly motivated and to improve. Please leave constructive and detailed feedback. If you are interested, I will be glad to return all reviews.

My fanfic is based on the movie Let Me In under the name "Realbullet". It's written for mature readers -- thanks for reading.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6630491/1/Traversing_the_Needles_Eye

The Mute and The Liar by Victoria Best reviews
I am a mute who only cares about mysteries. He's a liar who only cares about his youth gang. I didn't mind him, until he decided to break into my house, steal my salad, and oh yeah, kidnap me. / Most creative plot SKOW award winner / Featured on Project Fiction / Reviews returned.
Fiction: Romance - Rated: T - English - Romance/Mystery - Chapters: 2 - Words: 3,133 - Reviews: 528 - Favs: 178 - Follows: 236 - Updated: 11/20/2014 - Published: 3/11/2012 - Complete
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The Shattered End of Hollow Canyon (formerly known as PedoCelia) reviews
"She can't weigh more than ninety pounds. As soon as you see her, just grab her." That's what Dee told him, and Cody Kroft always had a soft spot for young girls. He couldn't bring himself to kidnap her. That didn't work out so well for Zandra - Now he has met Celia, an intriguing, troubled young girl living next door. Mature Content.
Fiction: Romance - Rated: M - English - Romance/Drama - Chapters: 57 - Words: 195,730 - Reviews: 50 - Favs: 6 - Follows: 9 - Updated: 3/15 - Published: 6/12/2012
Of Shoes and Ships and Shimmer Songs
The time has come, my gentle one, To save the planet's rings. With shoes and ships and Shimmer songs With cabbages and kings Why are the seas so boiling hot What makes the crystals sing? - Let me get this straight, right off – I don't want your pity. Keep it to yourself. All I want is to see the sun strike the planet's ring at High Shimmer. Is that too much to ask?
Fiction: Fantasy - Rated: T - English - Sci-Fi/Romance - Chapters: 3 - Words: 10,098 - Updated: 1/1 - Published: 12/1/2014
Middle Class Revolution: A Predystopia reviews
This takes place in an alternate reality where a plutocratic elite purchase government in the name of democracy. They pay millions to the government to receive billions in tax loopholes & contracts while ignoring economic infrastructure needed to support them. Good public debate is reduced to concerns as to where the President is born or how the president 'stole' the election.
Fiction: General - Rated: M - English - Drama - Chapters: 9 - Words: 20,766 - Reviews: 2 - Follows: 1 - Updated: 12/9/2012 - Published: 5/15/2012
Follow the Dodo reviews
Life along the eastern seaboard of the United States has a lot more than Gar expects. Gar begins middle school only to learn that some of his classmates hold the keys to greater secrets than he would even expect. Intended for 8-12 year-olds.
Fiction: Young Adult - Rated: K+ - English - Chapters: 4 - Words: 8,141 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 6/22/2012 - Published: 5/5/2012